Humor/Satire / My Homework (Analysis)

I appreciated the imagined self-awareness, having written more than a few homework assignments in that voice. Its funny, sounds like something a child might write in response to some odious task.

hmm..

my immediate reaction is that the lines ending ‘lines’ and ‘tries’ do not rhyme.  With the assignment to make the 4 lines rhyme, there should be consist rhyming.

But maybe that is the beauty in it…the first 2 corresponding lines do not rhyme while the second do…you have learned to master rhyming the second time around…..’It seems so simple, now’

Overall, I really like it.

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May 12, 2009

by ispeaknonsensestuff

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wow. thank you. i didn’t notice that.

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This is really cute.
Just recently I had to write a poem for my English class.
I can picture my teacher reading this poem and laughing.

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May 04, 2009

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thanks.^^

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Definitely filled with irony, especially while writing it. Could be published in an anthology book of poetry, however you may want to check the criteria before proposing it to be published in a lit. magazine.

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May 04, 2009

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ok, thanks. :)

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It does rhyme and it is cute and amusing. Poetry structure is in place and a small child would like it. Good job.

Sounds like something my nieces would love, very nice. ^^

Humorous. I like the A and B lines having the same number of syllables. And yes, I even liked it before I counted.

First suggestion, for such a simple (albeit humerous and funny poem), take off so many criterion, it’s annoying and frustrating to have to enter in six criteria for a four line poem. Leave 3.

The poem was humerous and it did make me laugh, so you’ve achieved what you set out to I think, I think serious poetry books are looking for something a little more substantial, but that being said you have in no way failed.

Good job.

I really enjoyed this. Not much there to critique but yeah. Either way, great job. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing. Peace.

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April 06, 2009

by ispeaknonsensestuff

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thank you. :)

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While it is cute and made me smile…it has a generic feel to it, but the creativity of the whole concept is cool.  Meaning you have so much more potential with it.  I think you can do better than you have…of course it will take a few more tries.

Enjoyed…look forward to seeing if you push it some more.

Peace Out,
William