Journal, Diary, & Blogging / All A-Twitter (Analysis)

Haha, my sentiments exactly on social networking sites, I just stick to the one and sucks to everybody who doesn’t get an exciting facebook insight into my life.
Well written.

Nicely written and easy to understand for a blog. The message came across clearly and the writer’s sense of narrative skill was obvious. I say this because of the natural way the experience was shared to the reader. The writer first shared his experience with his/her peers:

“I find out that I’m already behind the curve. The cool kids, apparently, are all about Twitter now.”

This sets the premise for the rest of the story. The next paragraph mentions the writer’s position on the topic. She questions why she should care about celebrity updates, Berlin weather (possibly because it doesn’t affect her directly).

The prose brings out an interesting point on society’s obsession with the internet and social networking in general. It makes the reader think and ask the same question ‘why?’

The only thing I think this text can improve on is the last paragraph where the writer has transformed from what she initially disdain (mundane information, 20 different technologies to post) into the ‘cool kids’ culture. I think the transformation was wonderful but came in too abrupt. An additional setup as to why she’s choosing the path would’ve made the prose more powerful and will leave the reader with an ‘ahh’ feeling.

Thanks for sharing.

This was good, it had an element of sarcasm/ playfulness to it rather than being a straight up, serious rag on Twitter. The ending sentence was especially humorous, because the joke about updating the world of your workout peaked how you feel about the site(s). Also, from reading this, you have furthered my desire -Not- to join such website. Thank you.

“Skyping…. How the” A period at the end of the sentence isn’t needed when it ends with three dots. Perhaps change it to ‘Skyping… How the’ or even lowercase the H in how and put a coma between them.