Non-fiction / Chapter 2: My Blue Heaven (Analysis)

Vera’s story: Period 1924 – 1937

“Nurse… Nurse, that’s it! Turn it up. Turn up the radio.”

She calmly sauntered back into my room in the maternity ward at St. Barnabus Hospital. One side of her mouth turned up as she passed my bed. She watched me holding my newborn son, Jae, out of the corner of her eye.

“Hurry up;” I said, “this is the show I told you about.”

She finally reached the radio on the table across from my bed.

“Alright,” she said, “I heard you.” She tuned in the station and raised the volume. “Don’t get yourself in a lather.”

Welcome back to The Wonder Bread Hour with the Paul Whiteman Orchestra. I’m Paul Whiteman and we’re going to start out the program tonight with the wonderful new singer, Bing Crosby of the Rhythm Boys. Take it away, Bing.

“Ladies and gentlemen, tonight is a special night. Our very own Maxine Murphy – You know her as one of The Rhythm Girls – Well, the stork just paid her a visit with a bouncing baby boy. We all want to wish her the very best, and Maxine, if you’re listening, this song is for you.”

I used several different stage names at the time, but when I sang with “The Rhythm Girls,” I went by the name Maxine Murphy. I gently rocked Jae in my arms and listened to Bing sing the most beautiful rendition of My Blue Heaven I had ever heard.

You’ll see a smilin’ face, a fireplace, a cozy room,
Little nest that nestles where the roses bloom.
Molly and me, and the baby makes three;
We’re happy in my, in my blue heaven!

I looked over at the nurse standing by the radio, now staring at me with her mouth hanging open. All I could do was smile. I looked back down at Jae with that red tuft of hair and stroked his rosy cheek with my thumb.

“You hear that Sonny Boy? He’s singing to us.”

Back when Joe and I first got married, local work was not always easy to come by. With both of us in show business, we spent more time on the road and away from each other than we ever spent together. I wanted to start a family right away, but Joe had more of a free spirit so the arrangement suited him just fine. It took three years into the marriage before we finally had our first child on December 30, 1927.

Jae brightened up our life in so many ways. Such a sweet smile never existed before. At least his Mommy and Daddy thought so. He grew into a real charming youngster… naughty, but oh, how we loved him.

About two months before Jae’s second birthday came the market crash of 1929. The stress of keeping food on the table and a roof over our heads took its toll. Right around that time, I found myself expecting again.

One afternoon, about seven months along, I stretched out for a short nap outside and fell sound asleep. A freak bolt of lightning jolted me awake when it struck my daybed. It scared the H. E. double crooked letter out of me and gave me a terrible burn on my back. The doctors insisted that I stay in the hospital so they could keep a close eye on the baby. I ended up spending most of the remaining two months in Cook County Hospital. Our sweet Dawn had such a rough start in life. Then four months after her birth, I was in the family way again, but lost twin girls in the seventh month.

As the years rolled on, Joe spent more time away. He took to coming in late from his nightclub jobs with cheap booze on his breath and lipstick on his shirts. We had a rough go of it almost from the beginning. I started to come unglued, but held myself together for the kid’s sake.

Joe finally found a steady vaudeville job in Chicago and sent money home when he could, but it was never enough so I went back on the road. Having to find a place for Jae and Dawn to stay while I worked in theatres across the country just added more strain. When I realized how much the kids really needed their father, I packed up the car and drove us all down to Chicago to be with him.

Practically as soon as we got there, he took off for a Vaudeville tour throughout the Midwest. I kept working through it all because I still had two mouths to feed. After a while, I picked up bookings at some of the finer rooms and supper clubs like the Chez Paree, and the Empire Room. I met a different class of people on those jobs. In fact, Marshall Fields, III thought a lot of my singing and took a real liking to me. He even used to have me out to his mansion in the country outside of Chicago.

One night when I was headlining with Sophie Tucker and Fred Allen at the Woods Theatre on Randolph and Dearborn, I noticed a dashing young man in the front row. Every time I looked his way, he had his eyes glued on me. I noticed he had a bouquet of roses under his chair and at the end of the night; he came right up to the stage with a big charming smile and held the flowers out toward me.

“Miss Reynolds?”

I used the name Reynolds for that job.

“Here, these are for you.”

“Ohh… They’re beautiful,” I said. “You shouldn’t have.”

“No - It’s my pleasure.” He held out his hand to meet mine and with a twinkle in his eye, he said, “Allow me to introduce myself. I’m Dr. William G. Birch.”

“Pleased to make your acquaintance.”

“I came here last night,” he said, “and I just had to come back. I love the way you sing.”

I thought to myself, what a catch. If I wasn’t married…

“Well, thank you for the flowers, Dr. Birch. That’s very thoughtful.”

“No, call me Bill, and like I said, it’s my pleasure.”

“Well I hope you come see the show again… and bring your friends.”

The next night, I was just gathering up my things to leave when I heard a knock on my dressing room door. When I pulled it open, there stood the young doctor holding his hat over his heart.

“Miss, Reynolds, please forgive the intrusion.”

“That’s alright. I was just leaving.”

“I came by to see if you might do me the honor of joining me for a bite to eat.”

“I’m flattered,” I said, “but I’m a married woman with two children. It wouldn’t be right.”

He didn’t seem put off at all, in fact he kept coming around. With Joe gone so much, in my loneliness, I eventually agreed to have lunch with him. One thing led to another, as it often does, but I called off the affair before it got out of hand.

I had not given up on my marriage with Joe yet. After everything we had been through, part of me still loved him. After all, we met when I was only fifteen. He was my first real love. I thought, if only I could go see him, we could patch things back together.

A few days later, I was getting ready to play my first set at the Green Mill, a local speakeasy when a couple of Al Capone’s men bellied up to the bar next to me. I overheard them talking about making a run to Detroit. I had the next couple of days off and the kids were still with my sister in Minneapolis. I knew Joe was playing a burlesque show in Detroit, so I butted in.

“You’re going to Detroit?”

The one next to me looked up from his drink and said, “Yeah, why?”

“I need to go there to see my husband. Can I hitch a ride?”

He turned away and exchanged a few words with his friend before turning back to me. “I don’t know, Sister. We’re just doing a little business; making a delivery and coming right back.”

“I can be ready to come back whenever you say.”

He looked down with his eyes squinted. “Hmm. Let me check with the boss.”

They all talked it over and agreed to take me along.

On the drive there, they decided to come see the show with me. We made it to the theatre just in time to buy our tickets and take our seats. The curtain rose and the footlights shined up at Joe standing center stage. He was the top banana, emceeing the whole show. He even sang a few songs and told some risqué jokes in between acts.

In one of his bits, he came out on stage, showed the audience a slice of bread and then put it in his pants pocket. He proceeded to sing, “A Pretty Girl is Like a Melody.” At the end of the song, he reached back into his pocket and pulled out a slice of toast. The crowd loved it. Joe had a way of playing to the audience and always showed them a good time.

At the end of the program, the boys and I returned to the car and drove around to the back of the theatre to wait for Joe to leave through the stage door. Soon, he appeared in the doorway, arm in arm with one of the ponies from the chorus line. The way she fawned all over him, I knew the score right away.
I sprang up in my seat and reached for the door handle, but the lug in the seat next to me grabbed my wrist and threw his arm around my waist to hold me back.

I said, “What are you doing?" I kicked and squirmed to get loose. "Let me go. I’m gonna strangle him.”

The moose with his arm around me didn’t respond, but the driver looked back over his shoulder and said, “Sorry, Sister. The boss said, ‘She can tag along, but bring her back safe and sound.’ We can’t let you go out there”

I knew I couldn’t break loose of the iron grip that moose had on my wrist, so I slumped back, shaking and wracked with anger. The sight of Joe laughing it up with that broad knocked the wind right out of me. I felt like such a fool. All this time I tried to be true to him, only to catch him playing around with some stage door floozy.

I started blubbering and the big moose in the seat next to me said, “Hey, Doll, want me to go teach him a lesson?”

As much as I wanted to say yes, I didn't. “Let him go. He’s not worth it.”

There’s no telling what might have happened if he had gotten out of the car that night. Part of me wanted Joe to suffer like I had, but he still was Jae and Dawn’s father.

On the ride back home, everything that happened between Joe and me played back in my mind. He used to keep a pocket full of nickels to hand out to kids on the street. He’d joke around and say, “Let me give this kid a nickel. You never know, he might be mine.”

I never took it seriously until the night he brought a fifteen-year-old Mexican girl into our home. He sweet talked me into taking her in because she was in the family way and had nowhere to go. I had my suspicions, but Joe could charm the skin off a snake and back then, I was just naive enough to believe him. The girl and I got along alright for the two or three weeks she stayed with us. Then she found another place to go and Joe and I never discussed it again.

I always tried to give him the benefit of the doubt, but the night at the stage door in Detroit changed everything for me. I went right back to Chicago, and moved on with my life. I decided to start seeing that doctor who had been so sweet on me. He made me feel real special.

Just when I felt like I might have a future again, Joe came back home and caught me in the apartment with Bill. I can’t say I regret it. Joe had it coming. I let him have it that night. I wasn’t about to let him make me feel guilty after everything he put me through.

When Joe finally left, I grabbed a pair of scissors out of the drawer. I went looking for our family photos and cut Joe’s face out of every last picture I could find like cutting a tumor out of my own belly. I threw the scraps in the sink, lit them with a match, and watched the images turn to ash. I took a couple deep, trembling breaths, doubled over and cried my guts out. It was finally over.

From that point on, Joe was dead to me. I never once looked back. Of course, he made it easy because I never saw him again. He never even once tried to contact Jae or Dawn – his own two kids. That’s all right, though. In fact, if you ask me, they are better off for it.

I filed for divorce a year later, in March of 1936, Joe lost all rights to the kids. Bill and I had talked about getting married as soon as we could, but an opportunity came up to revive the Rhythm Girls for some dates in Australia. We played in Melbourne and at the opening of the Trocadero in Sydney. At the end of the two month stint, I came right back to Chicago and married Bill.

Before long though, I landed back performing in my old gangster haunts. Then one night; I’ll never forget it. My life changed forever. New Year’s Eve 1937, the day after Jae’s tenth birthday – In the middle of my set on the bandstand at a local mob joint uptown in Skokie, all of a sudden, gunfire broke out. People screamed and ran for cover. I ducked my head down and dove under the beautiful grand piano until the nightmare passed.

As the room fell quiet, I emerged to find tables turned on end and broken glass everywhere. I walked out onto the maroon carpet, soaked in cheap booze, and almost gagged at the smell of gunpowder. Looking back toward the stage, I saw through the smoke that bullets had lodged in the side of the piano right above where my head had been.

When Bill found out, he insisted I never work in those clubs again. That night marked the last time I ever performed in joints like that. Within a few short months, we packed up the kids and moved to Michigan to start a new life.
 

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xtx avatar General Stranger

April 05, 2009

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This was quite enjoyable; the detail in your writing is very good.  It really gave me a sense of place and time.  The struggles with her husband were very believable, as we all know men like this exist out there.  Even though this is only the second chapter, it was nice to see she was able to piece her life back together with Bill, and make a commitment to no longer play those types of clubs again.  I couldn’t find any flaws in this, you seem to be on the right track to writing a thoroughly entertaining period piece.

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February 09, 2009

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Hey wordman, this is good stuff. It’s got a good voice to it – you can hear her speak. Writing wise it’s good, style and vocabulary etc. I think the only thing missing for me is a little more detail. I still feel that your rushing through things. For instance, when Joe’s up on stage we get the nice incident of him and the slice of bread, but I’ve no idea what he or the chorus or the stage looks like. It’s the small details that help us to build a picture – don’t inundate us with the details but just a little flourish will bring the story alive in our minds. It’s the same with the emotions. What’s Jae look like just after he’s born? The two goons – they could be interchangeable because you only use them as a tool to carry the story. What are they like? Why would they take a broad with them for a long road trip after ‘having a chat’. Why was she so willing to trust them with her on her lonesome. Because of the sharp jumps in time frame, we only have the answer as ‘because they do’. We don’t know the why of it. If one were to take a liking to her… or the club owner were to vouch for her… Or it would help with their cover as they travel… Anything that allows us to believe the situation. There are a few questions left hanging that make the story difficult to believe.

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February 03, 2009

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This is a good new perspective from another character’s viewpoint. Again the writing is lean and vivid. Still I’m not crystal clear what the heart of the story is—I don’t expect us to be there yet, and nor does it have to be spelled out (and yes I should apply this to my own writing) but while I’m enjoying the Telling I’m not sure enough why it’s being told. It is colorful enough to keep me interested, (almost). There is a hook missing. What are we headed toward?

I perused your first chapter again and I glanced at the mssg you sent me about where the story is going in latter chapters, and this felt like cheating bc I didn’t want to know yet. (But it’s true if I were holding the book in hand I’d have a sense of chapters and size etc). So I do sense more cohesion now in the story idea. Originally I thought there would be multiple chapters with a cast of male relatives over the generations;—“but one thing is certain; In his family, Lan Miller proved to be the first in a long line of benders.” Yes we do already know that Jae is “charming” and “naughty” so I sense where that might be going.

You still have “lightening” speed action (and I’m wondering whether that actual, odd lightening strike will factor in). Your speed is perhaps similar but not identical to the A.D.D. which you accused me of, because you jump linearly thru lifetimes, and I jump laterally among concurrent plot themes. (Your “linear” however is forward and backward btw – see ahead). If our readers are told that it will all converge eventually into a tight path, is that enough for them to keep reading? Apparently not; that’s why we review and edit. We need to hook them early with clarity and intrigue. Anyway, here’s some of your speedy action—the reader is kept too remote:

“About two months before Jae’s second birthday came the market crash of 1929. The stress of keeping food on the table and a roof over our heads took its toll. Right around that time, I found myself expecting again….As the years rolled on, Joe spent more time away. He took to coming in late from his nightclub jobs with cheap booze on his breath and lipstick on his shirts. We had a rough go of it almost from the beginning. I started to come unglued, but held myself together for the kid’s sake.”

We never hit the ground, rarely walk along with them. You write very expressively, so all you are missing is one sentence to, for example, really bring the depression home -- so we feel how it affects the characters. Right now it reads like you are caught between relating a family chronicle and crafting an anecdote-sounding universally valuable cohesive page-turner -- basically non-fiction which reads like a novel. This can have a long shelf-life, (we hope!)

We do join Vera for her trip to see Joe, and I’m ALMOST sure why this scene is so important. I do know and like the characters, and this is the result of your clear and colorful and sometimes emotive writing. “The sight of Joe laughing it up with that broad knocked the wind right out of me.” I felt it. Still, I don’t get why these two ever married. You jump thru it too quickly; (btw we hear nothing redeeming about Joe in this Vera section; also, remind us what is so great about Vera that this young dashing doctor had to be with her and her multiple children?)

Again, with your talent you are probably just a sentence off, here and there.

More on the speedy action: “When I realized how much the kids really needed their father…” That’s telling not showing. Also, “After everything we had been through, part of me still loved him. After all.”----No, I would say, BEFORE all, tell us something about their meeting and falling in love, in their teens.

The infidelity thing is twisted too. She does CHEAT on him while thinking he’s INNOCENT -- bc later she is shocked by his cheating. AFTERWARD you write, “I had my suspicions. // I always tried to give him the benefit of the doubt.” Maybe put this before she catches him, more Chronologically, so we get an accurate buildup and readout of their Emotions. All we know is he had a free spirit -- How did she FEEL about that, and about waiting three years to have kids? Otherwise it’s reading like a chronicle of family history.

But of course you have your powerful side. Just like with “See God”, the emotion is in the subtle details, “We’re happy in my, in my blue heaven!” Those are song lyrics, and they give a great framework. “You hear that Sonny Boy? He’s singing to us.” These emotions are indeed powerful to me, and in general I like the “subtle”, though I’m finding I do have to hit people over the head with things. You are very good at Emotions and yet they are missing from your story too often. How is she feeling in that hospital bed? “All I could do was smile.” I think there was a lot more.

Other lines are touching and powerful: “I thought, if only I could go see him, we could patch things back together.” But this part of the story can be fleshed out more. You Mention her loneliness.

Bc then there’s this: “There’s no telling what might have happened if he had gotten out of the car that night. Part of me wanted Joe to suffer like I had, but he still was Jae and Dawn’s father.” So there’s no sense of love or touchingness in her reasoning for not letting the mob guy get him. I just don’t get this relationship. Does it have to do with the vaudeville life, w bending, w the era?

More lightening action: “I filed for divorce …. Bill and I had talked about getting married, .... but an opportunity came up…for some dates in Australia. We played in Melbourne and at the opening of the Trocadero in Sydney. At the end of the two month stint, I came right back to Chicago and married Bill.”
What are we feeling?

It’s exciting that this is non-fiction and that you are forging a successful style of your own indeed, but don’t get caught up in the Truth  —is it an important detail that she lost twins? that she played at the “Trocadero”?
I genuinely and strongly believe in your talent and story, and I’m glad to be a part of helping you perfect it.

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January 28, 2009

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The showbiz lingo is wonderful. I feel i back in the twenties and thirties.   The best part is that it doesn’t sound forced. You paint a very good picture of a disintegrating marriage.  The bread in the pocket and the joke about giving the kid money because he might be mine is very catchy. You capture the world of vaudeville so well. I am impressed. I have a few more suggestions but i will reserve them until i see the next excerpt. I like that we have both the man and the woman’s account of that night with the man in the fedora. I see nothing striking about grammar but i usually look for content and then grammar when it is in the finishing stages. too many people pick on grammar which is secondary to the all important plot.  Grammar can be corrected easily but as i said nothing jumped out at me. Until next time Sandi.

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