Poetry / If? (Analysis)

You managed take one of the smallest english words and show how powerful it can be. If you had added any more or taken any less it wouldn’t work. it doesnt rhyme, but it flows so smoothly kudos and props whichever you prefer, this has quality either way.

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March 24, 2009

by 1turkiegirl

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37	F	Seth, WV	September 08

Thanks for reading & reviewing. I much prefer to employ the ‘right’ word, rather than force an exact rhyme that may take away from meaning. Slight, slant, and half rhymes are usually just as melodic & more effective (for me). Words that have same ending, middle, or vowel sounds are acceptable in today’s poetry. Right? Glad you like this. ;) I appreciate your comments.

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Hello,

Love, loved thsi piece. Simple yet it has its own complexities. So vivivly done. I hope I am right in thinking theis piece took some mental time to complete. I don’t have to ask you a single question about it, very clearly done but not without depth, flow and passion. Great piece!

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March 22, 2009

by 1turkiegirl

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37	F	Seth, WV	September 08

thank you. it took time to decide what to leave in & what to take out. There were a few more lines, but these summed up all emotions for me.

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I have to tell you, this is the best poem I have read on here in a long time!
WOW, so simple, yet so powerful. Simplicity is sometimes best. Great conveyance of your ideas/ideals. Flowed perfect for me. 10 thumbs up, this should either be in a book or on a greeting card. this is so going in my favs!
Thank you for letting me read this! Makes me wish I had wrote it!

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February 21, 2009

by 1turkiegirl

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37	F	Seth, WV	September 08

Thank you for you review & your kind comments!

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I really like the short, to the point manner of this poem.  I also very much liked the aesthetic beauty of it as the form is quite nice.  I like the staggered lines and how they all answer the line that precedes it.  Overall, I really like the theme of this poem.  These are all important questions that the majority of us have asked ourselves before.  Solid work.

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January 30, 2009

by 1turkiegirl

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37	F	Seth, WV	September 08

Thank you very much for reading & reviewing this piece. I am glad you like it.

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This one hurts. So much communication in so few carefully placed words and feelings. Wonderful revelation of the human dilema…needing, but not receiving.

McKinley

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January 24, 2009

by 1turkiegirl

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37	F	Seth, WV	September 08

Thanks again. I appreciate your reading and reviewing my poems. ;)

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