Flash Fiction / In the Winter (Analysis)

Capitalize Bugs Bunny.

It’s well written mechanically.  I just don’t get it.  Maybe if we knew what the daughter asked it would complete the story.  But without that crucial “plot device” the story really is about nothing.  Filling in a question there I think could inform the whole story and that would be all you need.

I hope this isn’t a piece into itself because there just isn’t enough here.  I need to know what the little girls asks.  Why don’t we get to hear that?

I wish you left notes for the reviewer so I could properly understand what you are trying to do here.

You’ve something to work on here. Why would a woman be crying because it snowed, but not out of sadness? If it’s happiness, she must REALLY like snow- It engages me but here it’s cut short. It grabs my attention, but it isn’t a complete story.

You don’t let us hear the child’s dialogue- this means we can’t gauge her character at all. We only “hear” one character’s voice.

I would love to read more of this. So many questions raised in the mind of the reader. So many places to go form here. Nice solid introduction…to so much more. Please write more.