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McKinley
Poetry / Art In the Dark
"Art in the Dark II”
You’re bathed in light
Everyone sees--
It’s darkness to me.
I long for but cannot possess
The vertigo of your eyes.
Close them: they’re entrancing.
Rugged child,
Prospecting beauty
From chaos and sound--
Slip your hands behind your back:
They’re treacherous.
The cadence of your steps pierces me
As you walk politely past.
Your pulse is the compass for my wandering.
Deny me your presence: It’s consuming.
And this desire,
It makes me high: I’m dangerous.
In the still gallery of my haunted heart,
Burning the wall, you become art.
…you are a beautiful consequence.
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jadedpoet reviewed Version 2 -
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Hi there,
This ia mental art. I love how this piece pulls the reader in. You draw such delightful visuals here. These words I have pasted below are pure writing genius. How you ever came up with the line about the pulse being your emotionally tugging compass is clever beyond mention. You have such a way of saying/ not saying that cannot be touched. Mind Candy at its finest!
“The cadence of your steps pierces me
As you walk politely past.
Your pulse is the compass for my wandering”
me…
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JesusFreak reviewed Version 1 -
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powerful peice.
the imagery that it produces puts a painting upon a canvas all can see.
just the feelings pouring from it can be felt whisch is neat.
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