Novel Treatments / Roadkill Synopsis (Analysis)
By Christopher Joseph
The Mighty IZ
Often times it’s not enough to be just us
I is the new we
We pimp dark shades, just to see;
The justice.
Tragedy has the unmistakable task of finding you at your most vulnerable moment. Two adolescent brothers, Rashon and Jaymon Turner, lives are forever shattered by the untimely murder of their beloved mother, Josephine, allegedly at the hands of their disgruntled father Raymond who accuses her of an affair.
Fate steps in, taking the brothers on two separate distinctive paths, which forever shapes them to who they are as young men. When their path rejoins 13 years later, Rashon is now a city dweller, Jaymon is a country boy, inspired in part by Aesop’s tale of City Mouse, Country Mouse.
His immediate family basically rejects Rashon Turner, and then he is bounced around from foster home, to obscure relative, to eventual imprisonment. Rashon is classified as an urban statistic, a young streetwise deviant, black and dangerous. Fresh out of prison he is ready to begin anew, leave the thug life behind, get a job. Unfortunately chaos has defined Rashon’s life, being his ultimate guardian angel since his mother’s murder and chaos has a way of finding you when you reject it.
After an ill-advised attempt to work again with his old crew to pay off old debts, things go awry and crewmembers end up dead on the streets of Harlem sending Rashon fleeing out of the city. With nowhere to hide he seeks out what his life has been missing for so long, his family.
Jaymon Turner on the outside is a lackadaisical, unemployed, slacker. On the inside Jaymon is a confused, upset, disaffected “baby boy” still deeply affected by the premature death of his mother by the hands of his now imprisoned father. Living now with his divorced uncle in Southern Pines, North Carolina, Jaymon can’t tell which way is up or down.
Jaymon lets his artistic side flow, painting pictures of his mother often in his mind and on canvas. Peer pressure and an obsession to fit in hides his true passions leading to Jaymon immersing himself in football, eventually becoming a varsity star player. A freak accident abruptly ends his budding career sending him on a downward spiral he can’t escape from as much as he tries.
Before he limps out of high school with no athletic scholarship in sight his cheerleader ex-girlfriend Jaysea is carrying his own baby boy Jaylin. After a half hearted stint in the National Guard Jaymon returns home and is struggling to find his way, floating from job to job, not taking care of his responsibilities and finding solace in smoking mad weed, eventually wallowing in his own self-pity and disgrace.
After a serious accident claims the life of his best friend Richard igniting a war with their racist weed-supplier Zack and his baby mother Jaysea announces her impending engagement to another man, life is not looking too well.
Surprise! In pops Rashon and life turns upside down for them both.
Intrigued by the curiosity of witnessing their upcoming father’s Raymond execution in Texas and with swelling enemies behind them each step of the way the boys decide to flee their problems. This results in a road trip that takes them from North Carolina through the southern belt ending all the way in Arizona.
With just a quarter of a tank in gas, $13.78 between them, a bag of chips, a few sacks of clothes, and only one baggie of weed between them - they still manage to flee their pursuers from NY and NC hot on their trail the entire way to their destination.
Along the way they rediscover each other and discover themselves, the good, the bad, and the ugly and also unwittingly bring a fugitive along with them, and her name is Teresita Alverez.
It’s survival of the fittest as they test the limits of convenience store robbery, gas siphoning, free-style flowing, class differences, family loyalty, road kill examinations and lessons in how not to give in to temptation. As pursuers move in close, the riders do a little family and life searching engagements and of course get plenty high.
After prison confessions and their surprise rider reveals her bombshell, shifting their life once again, the brothers separate again than reunite with a unified goal at their parents sacred ground to rectify what has oppressed them both for way too long. For two long disenfranchised youth, change is a sweet blessing.
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Two adolescent brothers, Rashon and Jaymon Turner, lives are forever
This part doesn’t flow well to me, removing the names and it seems fine but somehow with the names it sticks to me.
on two separate distinctive paths,
separate, distinctive
Rashon is now a city dweller, Jaymon is a country boy,
I think you need an and instead of the comma
His immediate family basically rejects Rashon Turner,
remove the basically, it weakens the statement and it works fine without it
of Harlem sending Rashon fleeing out of the city
of Harlem, sending
painting pictures of his mother often in his mind and on canvas
mother, often in his mind and on canvas
The only problem I have with this synopsis is that I am assuming you wrote this to spark interest for the actual story, so try not to give away the entire plot and ending of the story within a synopsis. Other than that, you do a good job of giving readers a feel of the characters and making us want to read more to find out what happens.
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