Poetry / "Another Oblivious Detonation of an Inferior Heart"

“Another Oblivious Detonation of an Inferior Heart”

(Sight of you)
Scent invades every nucleus
Of every atom

( Molecules dissipate)
I liquefy to vapor at flashpoint

(Experience forgets)
Warning signs are useless to my mind

(Closer)
Heart ticking to your footfall

(Oblivious)
Your brief presence detonates
The enduring poverty of your absence

(Blown away)
I wonder where my debris will litter your life?

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December 09, 2008

jadedpoet

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jadedpoet reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Hello Miss Cooper,

Hope all is well. It’s good to see you posting. I love you angle on life, love. This short piece is beautifully crafted. You have this piece flowing so very well. You make it way too easy to absorb and feel the wrought emotional tugging that goes on here. An absolute masterpiece! How clever you are!!! This rocks! me…

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December 09, 2008

by mckinleycooper

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Thank you so much for taking your time to read and review my work—I appreciate it more than words can say. I’m so glad you like this one. I’ve had the same muse for almost two years now, and I can’t seem to shake it! So many of my poems are focused on that being…
Thanks so much—encouragement is priceless.

McKinley