Poetry / Alone

After night has begun to fade, bringing light dismissing the shade.

No more can I hide in my dark solitude, now I must face all that is true.

Intruding on my secret unfounded fear,exposing my eyes as they fill with tears.

Bright lights denounce all that I am, there's no escape no matter what I do.

No longer sedate content in the dark, fear of rejection ripe me apart.

I am human full of fault and fable, trying to make things better while I'm able.

I fix my hair and make up on my face, only surface improvements take place.

Deep inside rages a cripping fear, making me cringe when anyone gets near.

Do I seem so strange to them, there's no way of knowing.

I walk around my head held high, prentending I know where I'm going.

I don't dare make eye contact for fear of what I might see in their face.

Am I broken beyond repair, when I look will I see a condesending stare.

Men with hunger in their eyes, women fearful telling outright lies.

I'm just a woman, alone and unsure, my intentions are good and pure.

I am so alone in this world and it gets more and more hard to bare.

Treasures of life mean nothing without someone with whom to share.

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December 18, 2008

rtpgurl

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22	F	Ashville, OH	November 16

rtpgurl reviewed Version 2 - Read 100% of the Item

I truly can appreciate and relate to this poem.
It sends a message in which a lot of people can really see themselves.
There are some spelling errors, but otherwise well done.

Merry Christmas!

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December 17, 2008

Alma_Libre

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37	F	Catonsville, MD	July 07

Alma_Libre reviewed Version 2 - Read 100% of the Item

Aside from a few spelling mistakes, which I won’t list as to not use up your credits. I found this piece very moving and emotional. I think a lot of people can relate to this during lows in their lives. I personally took this piece to heart. You are a very talented writer. I wish you the best of luck with your writing.
Best wishes and Happy Holidays,
Sandra (Alma Libre)

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November 06, 2008

neophytepoetess

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42	F	United States	November 10

neophytepoetess reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

This poem is honest and that is a really great start. I love the emotions you project in this, but do yourself and your poem a favor and spell check. Spelling errors can really take away from your piece. And don’t try to rhyme this poem is better without the end rhyme.