Thank you very much, melissa. :)
Poetry / Truth And Lies
I
Truth is not a subject in and of itself,
only one part of a greater whole.
Truth lies within the pages of oneself,
a passage in the volume of one's soul.
Truth is not meant to rest upon a shelf,
but should guide one's life in an active role.
II
To lie, one must know the truth.
Beyond the innocence of youth,
or the ignorance of blind devotion,
despite preconceived notions,
one must first know the truth.
III
Become intimate with the truth
and success will be conceived.
Become familiar with a lie
and only you will be deceived.
IV
By what is truth comprised;
is it merely what we believe,
or simply what we perceive?
And what constitutes a lie;
when beliefs can be contorted,
and perceptions can be distorted?
V
Truth has become idealized,
a dispossessed impression.
Indeed, what must be realized,
is truth at our own discretion.
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TinaR2684 reviewed Version 1 -
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This to me is brilliant. The way it’s split up and the way it’s written is pretty well done. It’s very deep and truthful about truth, of course. I also like how it seems more factual than emotional or anything but. Informative with a perspective that holds a lot of meaning which can be through many experiences. Good job on the rhyming as well. Didn’t notice it at first because rhyming is not something I usually look for, but it was well done in this piece. I’m adding it to my favorites.
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melissa_is_hiding reviewed Version 1 -
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Very clever! Layering the poem was extremely effective, as was your rhyming style.
Stanza I’s book allusion was very poignant. The line “not meant to rest upon a shelf” evokes great visual imagery.
A very clear and passionate piece.
JesusFreak reviewed Version 1 -
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To lie, one must know the truth.
Beyond the innocence of youth,
or the ignorance of blind devotion,
despite preconceived notions,
one must first know the truth.
its a bit echo this one
for you say the same twice at the top and bottom
and i dont think you need the bottom one.
i like how you put it in to parts.
it seems easier to understand.
Alma_Libre reviewed Version 1 -
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This poem really got me thinking.
And it is absolutely true. What really is truth? How many things in our every day life do we absolutely know to be true? How much can we trust the word of others?
I agree 100% with “Become intimate with the truth and success will be conceived. Become familiar with a lie and only you will be deceived”.
How very true that is.
I am guilty of getting caught up in my own web of lies and then become filled with paranoia at the thought of getting caught, only to find out that the person knew the truth all along.
Very good writing! Congrats!
shortnsweet46 reviewed Version 1 -
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Very thought provoking and full of legitimate truths. This is enough for anyone to second guess the life they have been living and for what reasons. Great structure as well! I havent quite learned how to put my poetry togethr like that, but you have done a great job. Keep it up!
DarkHuntress reviewed Version 1 -
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I thought this was a wonderful piece, and I love how you play with the stanzas. The only recommendation that I have is to omit the word “can” in IV S2 L2. Seems that the tempo is better that way to me. My favorite is III, concise and witty. Wonderful punctuation!
jokaking reviewed Version 1 -
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very intriguing and nicely done… good job
s2poets reviewed Version 1 -
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Tightly woven verse here,
you have something to say and
your voice is strong.
Work on more unusual
descriptions of what
means the most to you as a writer.
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