Poetry / Drawing The Line...

Very good, the clarity and imagery is good and the flow is good as well.

Hi there!

I read this thru a couple of times, just enjoying the intensity of its writer. I live and die for passion and reading this was pristine pleasure. Your abilities to tie things of life together with writing are killer.
On line four, maybe I am just dense but using the word “evidence” seems to fit but you possibly have other intentions here.
With line thirteen I feel “released” just flows and locks the line better but again, you are the writer.
This piece is a definitive keeper, containing so much passion, rage and clever emotion in such a short space. I read it over and over, just loving its ‘feel’. I adore your shear cleverness and emotional depth along with the ability to bring it all to the ‘surface’. So very well done! me…

I actually just wrote a poem about writing today, but I have not posted it on here yet. I thought this was good. I liked the theme of a blade slashing. I thought that was a good metaphor for writing. The rhyme scheme is very good. The flow is smoother at times then it is at others. But that is really the only critique that  I have.