Lyrics / [E.D]
What happens when
you take the words from a poet,
replace them numbers,
and bones to inforce it.
And it hurts to see
your heart is broken
as well as your body,
faded and so thin.
The back door out,
still leads to nowhere
This isn't fate, you could change
but you don't care.
"Is it just me or is it
getting colder in here?"
You shiver and then
shake the ice from you hair...
A permanent winter
where the snow is your skin,
the leaves in the trees dance
to the breath that is cold wind,
all the fire in the world couldn't
warm you, my friend,
and I wonder a morbid thought:
how cold will you get at the end?
Will you still see through the
spots in your eyes?
As you fade away will you
sleep through goodbyes?
Will the blackouts save you from
the thorns in your side?
Does an endless winter
bring an eternal night?
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hi there,
you seem to be all over the place in this piece, not really focusing on one theme..like E.D. what they maybe ..you didn’t mention it throughout..i know your not going to like this but you tried to get to creative…and ended up with a whole lot of poetic lines that do not belong together, cause together they don’t make much sense..pick a theme..title,use it, and stick to it, and use your creative poetic talent to develope it..cause you do have talent..it just needs to be rein in, tightenup nad focussed….hope i help more than hurt,,,jim
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