Poetry / The World of You

Well, I’ll tell you what…I really liked it. Maybe it’s the mood I’m in. It was simple. I enjoyed your word “peopled.” I thought it was a good line, I imagined it in a song. It has a very playful feel to it…I though it was fun how you tossed the word ‘kind’ around. I took it for what it was and then tacked my own story behind it. Neat piece.  

I think this writing is on wordplay which can be very clever, however, it lacks of depth in this attempt here.

My first question after reading and trying to understand it is -
How kind is the person – ‘you’ so that if ‘If the world were peopled/ with kind people like you/ then …/ ... the right kind of people/ ?

The character and the quality of ‘you’ are not given nor suggested here, so I would have to say that this attempt of wordplay is failed.

However, keep writing. Thank you.
Cheers.

This is a very cute piece to read! A little bit of tongue twister, very light hearted, it puts a nice message across. Although I personally wouldn’t call it a poem, it’s more like a quote. Good work.

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September 03, 2008

by BlueDemoness

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Thank you.  I guess I’m still trying to figure things out and labeling is one big thing for me.  I don’t do it well.  I had thought to call it a ‘ditty’ but…. :O) Ciao.

September 04, 2008

by pixistardust

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lol yeah urbis doesn’t have a category for “ditty” ...maybe they should ;)

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