Short Story / 6 words

Pretty good. It definitely feels hard to soar sometimes, doesn’t it?

drole, human, dark and funny, and unfortunately sometimes true when trying to create something, to succeed.
nice

I would have used an elipsis rather than a comma.

Who says just 6 words can’t depress?

That’s funny.  I like it.  It’s so true and it has happened to me so many times if I was into tattoos that’d be what I put on my arm.  I have a new motto.  Not really, but I like it.  No, I love it.  

It’d benefit with a title though.  Maybe…I was going to suggest something but I’ll keep it.  But yeah, come up with a title and it’d be even tighter.

simple and sweet
plainly what it is
a image of a angel/bird or other avian creature
so its like a bird about to jump and when they do they fall out of failure
so it provides great insight in to how one sees it.

This needs to be a quote or somethins else not a short story .It does not fit here .I get what you are saying and it is true for all of who are trying anything .We must start somewhere but failing is the compermise .

I think this is very clear and to the point. It says a lot and I think it is easily relatable. Nice work.

you might want to put this under another category.

On the line, maybe put it in the past tense—and fell. instead of fall.

Man, I know that feeling! Keep flying.

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August 23, 2008

by supra_speed

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thanks. its bound to happen though

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