Haiku/Senryu / Sweet Drink

Clear, cool water runs,
Summer sun overheating,
Creek, quencher of thirst

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August 19, 2008

william_the_artist

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
0	78.9% (38 votes)	100.0%

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william_the_artist reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I’m going to skip the technical side and go straight to the flow and feeling. I didn’t feel a nice flow with this one nor did I feel satisfied (quenched). I do like the subject but it could definitely be reworked to give it a better flow and more emotions. Good Luck.