Poetry / caring love

Perfect fit.

Aw, so sweet!  Caring is why we stay with people and love them for so long.  I definitely love this quote, it reminds me of how important it is to have faith in the people we love and look for the qualities that made us fall in love with them.  I don’t know how it really applies to the creative life but, if you were just writing it for fun, it’s very cute.  Great job!

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November 01, 2008

by lookingbeyond

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Hey thank you very much ,
I have another one here, I’m fixing to post , just for kicks and giggles ..
lookingbeyond

November 01, 2008

by lookingbeyond

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Hey thank you very much ,
I have another one here, I’m fixing to post , just for kicks and giggles ..
lookingbeyond

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  It’s endearing. I have ran across five or six memoirs about love, but yours and only one other were hopeful. The other memoir basically came to a similar conclusion…Love is a verb! Nice

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August 09, 2008

by lookingbeyond

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Hey thanks  debberdoo4  , I dont know how to puncutate to good ,  I mainly write songs and poems . and sometimes some foolish ryhming stuff,
take care  debberdoo4 ,,, like the nickname

your friend
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August 09, 2008

by debberdoo4

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I would really like to encourage you to try every genre of writing that interests you on this site. Sometimes you will receive the ‘stiff’ review, some people were born serious. But, for the most part, this is a free writing class with generous writers offering sound advice on your work. In reviewing, you will be exposed to such different forms of expression…test your limits. E-mail me if there is something you are hesitant about putting on the que, I’ll give you feedback-no points. We are all here to grow as artists :) Peace
P.S. my dad gave me that nickname

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Very nice. Caring is why? I don’t really get this but it sounds good. There is not enough love or caring in the world. sO I LIKE THE PREMISE. Sandi

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August 06, 2008

by lookingbeyond

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Thank you oknapp,  I thought about writing some lyrics on that premise ,
reckon I might give it a shot ,,
thank you again .
your friend
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September 16, 2008

by oknapp

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Yes, please do. Keep me posted. My name is Sandi

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I like this.

     While this would work very well on the inside of a greeting card and in that scenario touch a few hearts, I had to give a low rating for “poetry – overall”.  My reasons are these: 1) the passage is purely abstract.  There is nothing to link the reader physically to the statement, and sensory references are the key to drawing the reader in to what you are writing (which is extremely difficult, I know, when you only have six words to spare). 2) “Love is forever”... that phrase has been thoroughly exhausted and exploited by musicians, jewelry commercials, poets, and Hollywood.  I am sorry, I don’t mean to sound harsh, but I can’t think of a gentler way to say it without being honest. 3) Finally, since most of us have a finite life span, how can we know love is forever?  
      My suggestion is to bring things down a few notches; try to think of some ordinary, everyday thing your readers will see and think “yes, I know that!” Sometimes the most unextraordinary things  pack the most punch. Good luck; I definitely don’t have the knack for a six word memoir.

i liked ur 6 word piece, i think u hit the nail on the head. u put the right words together and it made it flow and it was nice and clear. great job!!