Poetry / birthday
ven aca hechisera
sit between my legs
let me pleasure you
with the sweet songs
my fingers strum
through your hair.
te dire nena mia
how much I love you
and desire your tongue
to knot with mine
—not a lie,
this whisper in your ear.
hacercate querida…
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does the first line mean to sit between my legs? If so use it as your title> and not the first line. What language is it?
is the 2nd stanza mean to feel your hair?
you have an excellent poem here. Try not to trick people.
I don’t know the language. But please suprise us.
Blessings, Gregory
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Well it’s not cheesy, it’s sort of a sweet little love poem but I always have difficulty when a foreign language is inserted without translation assuming everyone will know what is being said, so without looking up the Spanish words, one hasn’t a clue. Where is it going? Perhaps lyrics to a song, but as a poem it is unfinished. Sweet nothings from a lover to his lover at this point.
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