Short Story / Six Words (Analysis)

I have to say, at first I really didn’t like this. However after re-reading (yeah I know it’s 6 lines) and putting it into context it grew on me a lot. Your sex word memoirs are coming along nicely, and I’d like to see them all combined into a single finished piece someday.

I think it’s very succinct but I hope it’s stated tongue-in-cheek.

HAHA great! So true, so many of us lonely people, float through existence never leaving a mark.

lol I like this. It’s kind of funny the simplicity of it. I hope they choose this one because it’s just so unexpected.

This just looks like you didn’t even try.  Or you were in a funk that day and decided that life wasn’t worth really looking at.  Try again.  Think about what you do on a day to day basis that could constitute a “creative life”.  Could be anything.  Eating M&Ms in alphabetical colour order… or typing with Anglo-English spelling…

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August 04, 2008

by thepastinfuture

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I think you (and a few others) are assuming that a six word description of a life (creative or otherwise) must be filled with some specific thing.  These words indicate that something, but like so many people, those moments of something do not necessarily add up to much of anything.

Also, many reviews are assuming that the second sentence is a statement made in retrospect, like turning back and looking at life after it has unfolded.  Perhaps the second sentence is a statement more indicative of the very moment of birth.  I was born.  Nothing much happened.  The world continued to spin, people loved, hated, fucked, killed, died, kept moving without even noticing, I was born.  Nothing much happened.  An anonymous beginning, a blank slate, assumptions yet to be made, not necessarily an anonymous life.

Thanks for the review.

Maybe this is better.

I was born.  I was free.

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Ha.  Awesome.  This says a lot, while saying so little.  It can fit almost anyone, and is sad, funny, heartwarming, and chilling all at the same time.
i wouldn’t change a thing.  I have read a few of these, but this is the only one that i really really like.  It is what it is and doesn’t try to be anything more.

Quite stark as far as a memoir goes. It’s a bit cheeky, with a side order of snark, which I like. It probably won’t be some peoples’ style.

“I was born. Writing came second.”

I think you meant to post this under the Quote section, for it is too short to be a short story.

Okay, I have to stop laughing and review this.  I love it.  We all have a pretty boring life if you think about it.  Sometimes we need to just thank God for a normal life, I guess.  I like this.