Dude, I was baked when I thought of this line. Thanks for your kind words and well thought out review!
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We were dying inside Mother’s Womb.
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lukas reviewed Version 1 -
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i would change were to are. This makes it sound like we’re not dying anymore and we are.
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creativemind reviewed Version 1 -
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Another poem that is so short, but says so much. It’s such a big topic and you hit it on the head in just ten words.
Matthewtuckey reviewed Version 1 -
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Hm. I can see that you were high. I like it: It’s sinister and thought-provoking. Creative people tend to be kind of twisted in that way. I’m not sure that everybody living “the creative life” would have had that foetal problem, though. And unless you have a twin, the sentence doesn’t quite make sense.
Good, but not completely tied in to the creative life, I don’t think.
anaphylaxis reviewed Version 1 -
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MrJawbreakingEquilibrium reviewed Version 1 -
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Wow. Wasn’t expecting that. I was like I’m going to read this and try to give a six word review. Then I read it and it depressed me. In a good way, like a sad movie would. It had me already imagining a story in my head, being the writer I am, of what was going on. Like I said to somebody else about this short fiction; this being the shortest (and newest to me): “I guess that’s kind of the point.” Good job. It definitely struck a chord.
Oh, and being high’ll do it.
isntlifejuicy reviewed Version 1 -
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Its phenomenal whats created while high!
I really do like this. (To me) it conveyed Atticus Finch’s old quote “we were licked a hundred years before we started.”
But it could be about something entirely different. Perhaps thats why I’m so intrigued by these six-word memoirs. So much can be said by so little.
orangemilkcrate reviewed Version 1 -
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perhaps it would be more clear is you defined “we”. suggestions: all, families, children, men, students, citizens, etc.
very nice, though.
lu.
squarehopper reviewed Version 1 -
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who are “we” and are all of them in the same mother’s womb?
Not clear.
Better is Death began in my mother’s womb… or something of the like.
snarfus reviewed Version 1 -
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Whoa. I’m not quite sure what this means, but it’s powerfully delivered. The message and intent are vague, but it conjures up such a strong image that I’m not sure it matters. Not much else to say.
c2darad reviewed Version 1 -
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It certainly conveys a strong idea, I’m assuming abortion? Not sure if it’s a memoir about your life, as you’re obviously alive, but either way I really felt something from it, and then again I could be way off with the meaning.
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