Non-fiction / 6 Word Memior

Thanks. :)

Hmm…. thanks, your comments give me much to consider. You say it was a bit plain… I was mulling over changing it to something like “Revealing small glimpses of my soul,” but I almost like the simplicity of the original statement better. No fancy words, just plain and simple and powerful. Sometimes it’s better that way. I don’t know, I’m still thinking about it.

statement- yes.  that’s what your piece is.  and that’s why it doesn’t really have any “kick” to make it stand out.  how about,
“Unbutton my blouse. Behold my soul.”  It’s evocative and sensual…and my mind is in the gutter.  again.  

Well, that definitely has more kick to it – it’s also not my style at all. I like the “behold my soul” part, lol. I know what you mean about it having no explosion or jolt or kick, though. I’m just not sure what I want to do about it – if I like it that way or not.

Thanks!

Thanks for your comments…. I like having the verb there because it gives the phrase a sense of action. “Baring” being simultaneious with “writing.” It works the other way, too, I just personally prefer the action word.

Yes, it sure is…. that’s why it can be so nervewracking letting others read what you’ve written, because it’s not just something you wrote, it’s expressing something deep and personal – usually. But usually soulless writing isn’t much worth reading, don’t you think?