Poetry / Six Word Memoir V

I like how this uses imagery as your key poetry element, but it just doesn’t stike me as ponder-worthy.

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I love this quote for it says so much in so few words. The use of the word congealed is a very clever fit. It pulls great visuals. Very nice work! me…

I enjoyed this. It does exactly what you set out for it to do. Thank you for sharing.

This is the only one I read that has something to do with writing! Very well put. I think most people here can relate.

Well said, but- and I have to say this- not especially novel. Writing has long been considered an extension of the soul; although I do like “spilled” and “congealed”, which suggests that the soul in question is distasteful.

I’m giving a low rating because I have critiqued a lot of 6 worders. The great ones have imagery and irony. What spills out of your soul? Blood? that congeals. Soul is such a powrful word, it permeates music, religion, but yet so abstract and for many writers, trite. Make the soul solid. I am not rewriting this for you, but maybe soul=trembling hands, or not enough money for the post, or having to get food from the church. Congealed is a solid word and I’d keep it. But what about “words.” couldn’t they be specific?

trembling hands slashed, blood congealed, spirit
Holy spirit, Jesus, hungry for paint

Something on those lines. But it is a memoir. About you. I am not submitting to the anthology. But this shows you how important the economics of words are for poetry, fiction. Best to you. Gregory

Nice. I like how you side-stepped the physicality of life and focused instead on the cerebral & emotion. Nice

I’ll be passing this on to a poet friend as the story of his life that someone else wrote first. Excellent work for something so compact.