Haiku/Senryu / 6 word memoir

well, a creative thought on a 6 word story.

I’m not entirely sure what this is about. BUt here are my thoughts. There’s a muse, but you can’t get what you want out of her. Or she just gives you the wrong thing completely (even though it seems pretty damn good)

The image of the muse being not inpiration but something that comsumes is effective.

I’d revise this with some punctuation, at least a period at the end, so it will be taken seriously.  Of course, with a message so vulgar that might be difficult, but at the same time it seems very daring.

Wouldn’t it be the other way around? You blew a muse, swallowed and now you’re a writer?

Maybe I’m mistaken. Either way, thanks for sharing.

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July 23, 2008

by Judes

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yeah i guess it even works better this way, didn’t think about that. muses can be boys too. thanks for the idea

tjk

July 23, 2008

by TnD

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You’re welcome. Good luck with it.

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i read ur piece and i really didn’t like it. it was unclear to me as to what u were saying. it kinda left me thinking as to what to say in the critique.

This one is interesting.  I’m not sure I really get it, but it paints an intriguing picture.  Good luck.

B.

It’s loaded that’s for sure. Powerful. The need for a muse to act as creative catalyst? It’s got me thinking.