Flash Fiction / Six Word Memoir

for just six words, this is better than most haiku ive read.

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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45	M	Elk Grove Village, IL	November 11

Thanks. Maybe I’ve found a new genre :)

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This is nicely worded.  I’m curious about what you regret?  Have you not done what you would like to do or are you sorry for something you’ve done?

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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I was jotting these things accross the full range of emotion. This one was darker than most of my tries, but it was (in my opinion) the best. I don’t know anyone who is free of regrets…though some have delt with theirs better than others. Thanks for the review ;)

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i like it. your writing speaks the truth. it is often that outer unclarity that results in inner darkness and unsureness. best of luck to you.

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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Good interpretation. Right on. Thanks for the review.

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This is mirror in which i see my own face.  Quite effective!

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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Though it is dark, I hope that this piece makes some people feel less lonely. Thank you.

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Good bit. Dripping with truth.

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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I’m glad you liked it. I tried to be honest.

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Makes me think of foggy nights in San Francisco.Gloomy nights.Crowded bars. It’s nice.

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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Cool take on it. I’m glad it involked a positive memory for you.

July 29, 2008

by PenelopeMV

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it did:)

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A nice little look at what’s inside. Hints at a past. Very cool.

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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Thanks. I tried to be courageous.

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The the “Poe”etic 6-word sentence. I think it leaves too dreary and dull a sense to really send shakes of thought up someone. It’s close, but I think it needs more shock to it’s final phrase.

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July 24, 2008

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Hm. So, regrets are too soft. Maybe: ”...blood everywhere…”?

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While this is on the dark side, I believe it will create curiosity enough for the reader to continue.

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I’m glad you were piqued :)

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I think this is too personal and too specific to your own experience.  Granted it’s a memoir, but at the same time an effective memoir is one that others can relate to.  I did not get the feeling that “I’ve been there” nor did this spawn any images of events in my head.

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July 24, 2008

by campb26593

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I’m seeing two types of reviewers on this. Those who relate intensly, and those (like you) who feel no connection to the imagery. Sorry to disappoint you. Thankfully, it seems to make the first group feel less alone. I appreciate the review.

July 25, 2008

by metaphoricalsimile

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You can’t write everything for everybody, so I wouldn’t say I was “disappointed.”  I’m glad that you’ve found so many that connect to the message.

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