Many thanks Gavin. Sometimes a soft word is just as powerful as a strong one.
God that sounds anal and pretentious.
My life laid bare in ink
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There’s something… I think it’s the words “laid bare” that don’t quite sit right with me. They don’t seem to flow seamlessly with the ink imagery (I can’t put any better than that). But I can’t think of any suggestions, so you can more or less disregard this qualm.
Other than that, it’s very clear, concise (kinda necessitated by the 6-word requirement), and, as an explanation of a writer/ink artist’s life and work, very fitting.
good quote…writing is just the act of taking private thoughts and making them public.
so true, if you write that’s all your life is. like it
This is particularly good, I like it, its especially strong when reading it because of the duel meanings behind the words and there interpretation. As for a written qoute its great, but perhaps not so strong verbally.
Good work
Gavinswar
Very good. Concise and clearly states your message. I might suggest replacing “life” for “life’s” as the contraction of life and is; that way, it feels more like a complete thought than a sentence fragment.
Hmm. This one makes you think. To me it means that your life is always written down. Yuor birth certificates, licensec, and when you get a job. Yuo are always siging things siging your life away. When we write down in our journals or write stories a piece of us is always a part of that. That quote deifnalty makes you think.
I love it! I can not find flaw in this. We put it all out there leaving ourselves exposed.
I like it, but some reason I originally read it as “My bare life laid in ink”. I liked that, but I also like what you really said. What you wrote stresses that it’s the actual “inking” of your life on paper that is making it bare, not that it was bare already.
Great Work.
Wow. Thats all I got. Its one of those phrases that bounces around and around in your head. Wish I thought of it….. wow…..
beautiful memoir. so raw. so fresh. so vulnerable. you said so much in so little. its amazing. your chances are good
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