Quotes / Yet another six word writing quote

My life laid bare in ink

You need to log in to urbis or create an urbis account to review this writing.

Reviews

Sort Reviews by  Newest |  Oldest |  Highest Quality |  Lowest Quality |  Newest Comments | 

 
Soninmyeyes avatar General Stranger

April 29, 2009

Soninmyeyes

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
Soninmyeyes reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

There’s something… I think it’s the words “laid bare” that don’t quite sit right with me. They don’t seem to flow seamlessly with the ink imagery (I can’t put any better than that). But I can’t think of any suggestions, so you can more or less disregard this qualm.

Other than that, it’s very clear, concise (kinda necessitated by the 6-word requirement), and, as an explanation of a writer/ink artist’s life and work, very fitting.

saxmastadrew avatar General Stranger

February 21, 2009

saxmastadrew

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
saxmastadrew reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

good quote…writing is just the act of taking private thoughts and making them public.

pigpin avatar General Stranger

February 15, 2009

pigpin

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
pigpin reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

so true, if you write that’s all your life is. like it

Gavinswar avatar General Stranger

February 04, 2009

Gavinswar Prolific-icon-medium

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
Gavinswar reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

This is particularly good, I like it, its especially strong when reading it because of the duel meanings behind the words and there interpretation. As for a written qoute its great, but perhaps not so strong verbally.
Good work
Gavinswar

snarfus avatar General Stranger

December 14, 2008

snarfus

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
snarfus reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Very good. Concise and clearly states your message. I might suggest replacing “life” for “life’s” as the contraction of life and is; that way, it feels more like a complete thought than a sentence fragment.

ashflower avatar General Stranger

December 08, 2008

ashflower

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
ashflower reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Hmm. This one makes you think. To me it means that your life is always written down. Yuor birth certificates, licensec, and when you get a job. Yuo are always siging things siging your life away. When we write down in our journals or write stories a piece of us is always a part of that. That quote deifnalty makes you think.

landon_ap avatar General Stranger

December 02, 2008

landon_ap

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
landon_ap reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I love it!  I can not find flaw in this.  We put it all out there leaving ourselves exposed.

SoulSubstance avatar General Stranger

November 26, 2008

SoulSubstance Prolific-icon-medium

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
SoulSubstance reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I like it, but some reason I originally read it as “My bare life laid in ink”. I liked that, but I also like what you really said. What you wrote stresses that it’s the actual “inking” of your life on paper that is making it bare, not that it was bare already.

Great Work.

allthingsconsidered avatar Random Review

September 08, 2008

allthingsconsidered

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
allthingsconsidered reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Wow. Thats all I got. Its one of those phrases that bounces around and around in your head. Wish I thought of it….. wow…..

CourtshipLives avatar General Stranger

August 18, 2008

CourtshipLives

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats
CourtshipLives reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

beautiful memoir. so raw. so fresh. so vulnerable. you said so much in so little. its amazing. your chances are good

Showing 1 - 10 of 22
Next →

Creator
MisterP avatar

MisterP

Age: 47
Loc: United Kingdom
Gen: M
Last Login: November 18
Relevant Links
Item Stats

GENERAL

22 Reviews 11 Comments
Version 1
Latest Activity: 6 months ago

REVIEW QUEUE

Appeared in Queue: 60 Times
Skipped: 9 Times
Large_criteria Ratings & Rankings
Large_opportunity Opportunities
Tags

There are no tags for this item.