Non-fiction / My life today

Good self awareness, and completeness of who you are.  It seems like it is lacking emotion.  I enjoyed it, though – as it is true for many.

Very descriptive. I think this is the kind of thing they are looking for! Good job!

• add/view comments (1)

July 20, 2008

by TennNicole

personal info reviewer stats

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
70	100.0% (17 votes)	34.4%

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
29	F	Chattanooga, TN	July 07

Thanks, AlphaWriter.

You must login to the site or create an account in order to post a comment.

A lot of entries do seem to be clusters of descriptive phrases, and though that isn’t necessarily a bad thing right off the bat, it’s easiest, and so you see a lot of it.

The only thing I don’t like about this is that, while you have a small bit of continuity  from “night -> day -> forever (sort of, on the last one)”, the transition from “writer -> teacher -> learner” is even less direct.  I’d focus a little bit more on the overall theme.

Nice shot.  I’ve been looking at a lot of these and most people are missing the fact that it needs to be a memoir and therefor tell some kind of story or at least relate a process.