Non-fiction / Write On!

You say a lot in just six words.  I like.  I had to read it a couple of times to get it, but “no matter”.  Bonus points for the rhyme and two-word sentence symmetry.

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July 28, 2008

by trident

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thanks! that’s a great compliment.

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Unsure about your goals for this as “non-fiction.” However, I do like your word choice. All these words are crisp and pointed. I’ll check out your longer pieces.

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July 28, 2008

by trident

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I assure you this is my life story. ;-)

July 28, 2008

by trident

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BTW – I just uploaded my first short story. I hope you have a chance to check it out.

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Nice picture you paint, for if one were consumed by the pianist you would not notice the coin. Nice one! Good luck.

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July 26, 2008

by trident

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Wow! I’m impressed with your vision – I think you’ve added to this immensely, and it just goes to show that a 6-word story is only as vibrant as the mind of the reader.
Cheers!

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My immediate reaction was that it reminded me of Dorothy Parker.

hi there,

something tells me you write lyrics for songs/which i do too, and have dropped things on my keyboard/but i stink anyway, so it don’t matter..the matter/clatter ryhme also is clever..(another clue of a songwriter..:)..nice one, jim

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July 26, 2008

by trident

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Hi Jim,
Thanks. That’s a great interpretation. I’m actually a bit afraid of poetry, and am not sure where to start with lyrics, but I’m keen to give it a go. Gimme some pointers!

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This is very different…it has a unique flavor to it, and that adds to it. The word choices make the reader question what it may be about, and that gives the piece strength. The staccato punctuation of the period usage is extremely effective, as well.

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July 26, 2008

by trident

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Thanks – usually (to quote a line from my favorite movie) “the nail that sticks up get’s hammered”. I’m pleased to note there are quite a few exceptions on this site.

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I like it!  Write no matter what.  We are all driven that way, aren’t we?

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July 26, 2008

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Thanks. I just wish a few pennies would drop into my pocket. :~(

July 27, 2008

by sjvance

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ME TOO!  LOL  

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It lacks clarity, at least to me. Penny drops is meant to be representation of not making much money as a writer? That’s the closest I can decipher it and even then it’s obscure.

I’m afraid that I don’t understand the connection between keyboards and pennies. Is it, “You shouldn’t write expecting to make money.” “You should write for the sake of writing.” Am I even close? :)

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July 25, 2008

by trident

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Thanks for the review. I’m a firm believer of people forming their own conclusions – some do others don’t. Having said that – “Penny drops” is a metaphor – not meant to be taken literally.

October 29, 2008

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You’re welcome. :)

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I think this speaks of concentration with brevity.