Flash Fiction / Six Sense (Analysis)

Fitting of the title

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July 22, 2008

by ThomasAlan

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This memoir seems a little harsh. It doesn’t so much convey who the person is as much as it makes you curious to know more, to know what’s behind the words that were chosen. Definitely intriguing.

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July 20, 2008

by ThomasAlan

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thanks!

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I’m confused.

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July 20, 2008

by ThomasAlan

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sorry

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If you were looking for rhyme you did it .But it is a little common on thought .

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July 20, 2008

by ThomasAlan

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This took me a while to digest, but now I see it’s pretty tragic. Any particular reason you chose the last two to be nouns instead of past tense verbs?

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July 20, 2008

by ThomasAlan

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bait and bust can both be verbs as well

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well i read ur peace and it wasnt clear to me. i didnt get it.

I like the repetition of the Bs. But wouldn’t “bred” come after “born”? And why “bait”? Would it not make more sense to bait someone in order to get them to buy? Maybe this is just being too picky.

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July 20, 2008

by ThomasAlan

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58	M	State College, PA	November 21

I chose bred in the sense of conceive.  Bait can be a result, not an action.  Analysis can never be too picky if it is thoughtful….thanks for yours.

TA

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