Lyrics / Wasted

Head pounding with the pain
Still I see you
The arms in which I have lain
Vanished with the sun

Where did you go, away from here
What dreams have become, become unreal
Raking my life to pieces, shedding wasted tears
And there you are, once again

Ripping into my soul
Taking my life in your hands
Dig your nails in to grab ahold
Wasting it all again

And I cry in the dark

In the corners I hide my shame
Evils rising, past to swallow whole
So bright a world when you came
Makes me feel the darkness

And so deep inside

Ripping into my soul
Taking my life in your hands
Dig your nails in to grab ahold
Wasting it all again

Wasting my pride
Wasting my bloody tears
Wasting away in the dark I hide
Tormented by the fears I cling to

Ripping into my soul
Taking my life in your hands
Dig your nails in to grab ahold
Wasting it all again

Wasting me again

Reviews

July 22, 2008

NightRainbow

personal info reviewer stats

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
0	47.4% (19 votes)	100.0%

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
45	F	Erie, PA	August 07

NightRainbow reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

The rhythm of this, if it is meant for a song, could use some tweaking.  The best way to hear the rhythm is to read it out loud.  As for the content and interest-producing aspect, you did a wonderful job!

• add/view comments (1)

July 22, 2008

by DarkHuntress

personal info reviewer stats

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
46	74.1% (27 votes)	48.1%

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
24	F	Salisbury, NC	January 04

Could you offer some concrete advice on this one?  It is the only song I have ever written, and likely the only one I ever will, so I need advice.  Additionally, I feel that this post requires a concrete idea to be a quality review.  Thank you.

You must login to the site or create an account in order to post a comment.

July 22, 2008

oknapp

personal info reviewer stats

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
1455	82.1% (587 votes)	63.4%

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
47	F	Salem, IN	November 09

oknapp reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

This 158 word review has not been unlocked.

July 19, 2008

cooljim102055

personal info reviewer stats

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
930	72.0% (375 votes)	19.2%

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
54	M	Taunton, MA	November 20

cooljim102055 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

hi there,

well i like it and can relate, like i’m sure others can. i think i would change the title though, from wasted..(could mean drunk…:) “to wasting it all again”..i like the ryhme lain with pain also, first time i saw that one..:) which of couse is a good thing…nice job, jim

• add/view comments (1)

July 19, 2008

by DarkHuntress

personal info reviewer stats

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
46	74.1% (27 votes)	48.1%

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
24	F	Salisbury, NC	January 04

Hi, Jim!  Thank you for the review, and I will definitely consider a change in title.  My only concern is…was it not the title which prompted you to read the piece?  If so, would it not stand to reason to leave it as-is?  Just let me know honestly what made you read it, as I am seriously considering changing it.  Again, thanks for reading!

You must login to the site or create an account in order to post a comment.

July 18, 2008

Elven_Vampiress

personal info reviewer stats

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
121	68.6% (70 votes)	54.1%

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
24	F	Emmett, ID	August 28

Elven_Vampiress reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

What a poinant gripping piece! I’d dearly love to here this with the music!

• add/view comments (0)

There are no comments on this review.

You must login to the site or create an account in order to post a comment.

Showing 1 - 4 of 4