Humor/Satire / Six Word Memoir - Part Deux (Analysis)

Great imagery. Trundling is certainly a good way of putting it. Damnation’s preferred method of transport?

I like the piece very much and think it works perfect for the context of this contest.  I do think the word trundling is a bit too much and makes me think a thesaurus has been at work here, which isn’t a bad thing in writing but in a six word structure may be a bit much.  I love the memoir and the tone, just take it down a notch.  Good luck.

I actually very much enjoyed this piece.  It evoked a wry grin and a clear visual that I could easily encompass my own life.  I also feel that trundling is acceptable here, because we move forward and rotate much as the earth on its axis, and I see no problem with the use of it in this context.  I have enjoyed what I have read so far, and plan to continue reading more of your work.  Thank you for allowing me the opportunity!

Interesting, though unspecific.

I am not a professional reviewer.

I enjoyed the dark satire of this writing. You have conveyed the intent well, and from a structural context, I will suggest there may be a grammatical error.

Trundle is a transitive verb that means “to propel by causing to rotate”. It would be used with reference to a circular object or wheels. I believe your intent was to convey general, non specific movement (aimlessly) as opposed to the specific action of rolling.

I enjoyed it. Thank you.

A progression, a foregone expectation, a realization of things to come probably based on things past.
Some will pick your words apart, your grammar to pieces, they will interpret and analyze. Only you know your mind and the words that come out of it.
I’ll say good work, keep writing and use the underlying humor that shows in those six words.
PIM

Interesting. Would recommend changing “aimlessly” unless you really do write without a reason. There are also a number of these submissions that have similar chaotic/aimless/wandering themes, so it’d be good to differentiate yourself from the pack. You could cut “my” and the sentiment and clarity would remain the same. It would also give you an extra word to play with. “Trundling” isn’t my favorite word—seems like it’s being used solely to add depth via an elevated vocabulary, but it could be a personal preference, so it might work out for you just fine. Good luck.