Non-fiction / 6 word memoir: My Life as a Writer

It’s a very interesting image, not least because paper can be used with kindling to start a fire. I find it even more interesting that you use embers rather than fire. Embers simmer and glow, but they don’t burn, they don’t roar. Perhaps the embers grow into fire when the page is read? In any case, you’ve succeeded in getting your reader (or me, at least) to speculate about your meaning, and that’s always a good thing.

After reading this piece, I am left wondering “and” what else. I mean, it seems as if you were frozen in thought, i mean what follows the page after it is transformed. You could probably say

Transfixed, a page’s resonance abounds or something to that effect.

This is very pretty.  It appears that your writing life has been successful.  Good luck!

I like the fact that there’s something to visualize here.  It almost fires up the page for me (screen)  I would make it more explosive though and put something in place of the words “a” and “into” and “transformed”.  I would simply use words that are more powerful

Having a hard time seeing a story behind this, what is this page and why is it burning?  Maybe something like “Her diary transformed into glowing embers” gives a better hint of a story?

well written, I can relate. Good luck

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July 28, 2008

by daedalus

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You seem to be the only one who gets it.  Thanks.

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Nice imagery, but the piece seems a bit stilted.  

A quick polish should do the trick.

This leaves it to feel as something is missing.  Perhaps something such as A writer’s life forever being penned, or such …I think your idea here has lots of potential if you just rethink the order and choice of a few words.  That’s my 2 cents for what it’s worth, haha.  Good luck!

This is a really tough contest and this entry is probably somewhere in the middle. I don’t think it’s very good. There is a narrative at least, although it’s very lacking and trite. It’s better than some I’m sure. It’s simply not original and won’t measure to the upper echelon of entries which will have more originality and some measure of thematic content.

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Idiot.  You don’t even know what it means.

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Beautiful!  I see in the “transformation” that your writing for you grows like a flame, with your ideas as the spark that allows that flame to grow.  In this piece, perhaps the most important phrase is “glowing embers”; embers come with a fire’s death, but that they continue to glow suggests the fire lingers until the flame can be rekindled again.  You’ve said a great deal in this brief work, and I’m sure it has a high shot at doing well in this competition!

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by daedalus

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nope.  i’m simply saying that i throw more writing into the fire to burn up than is worth reading.

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