Non-fiction / Go for it.

Hmmm I am not sure what to make of this one. It reads a bit like yoda speak to me. I don’t know if you intentionally put the words in a strange order or not but I am missing the point behind as to why you are doing that. But I have to admit though, it does make the reader think about it. It makes me wonder why the unusual ordering and it makes me play with the words in my head, mixing up the words in different configurations and trying to obtain different meanings.

This is semi confusing. I am assuming that it is supposed to scrambled. If that is so, than it becomes a case of putting them in the right, which it seems there are several variations and none of them really seem to touch on the topic.

Maybe try putting the words in reverse order instead of scrambled, since there are multiple combinations. the word order is the one that seems out of place, try substituting it.

It is possible this is going completely over my head.

The shuffling takes a moment to comprehend, but it’s a pretty good statement about the ‘creative life’. It reminds me of all those times I’ve had the perfect sentence in my head, but as soon as I grab a pen the words shuffle and it’s just gone, with only a few leftover words that don’t make any sense.

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July 27, 2008

by trident

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That’s very good! And spot on!

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I hate to say this, because I actually like this quote, but it reminds me of the Spongebob episode where SB gets all mixed up because Bubble Bass says he leaves off the pickles. There’s a whole journey through playful use of language there and this reminds me of it. The episode is called “Pickles” as I recall.

I like it. I am disturbed by SB popping into my head. With that being said I might suggest maybe no caps? Order--capitalized--makes me think that it should go first in the puzzle you’ve created. Perhaps capitalize the word that goes “first” to help the reader out a bit, or no caps at all.

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July 27, 2008

by trident

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Thanks – ha ha. so, who watches Spongebob? You or those two boys of yours. Now you’ve got me wondering. I spend so much time with my laptop on my knees while the kids watch TV – could this have been it? Mind you, i just watched Simpsons – The Movie – and there was a classic piece of Monty Python in there. And Rush Hour III has a parody of a famous baseball comedy routine “Wu’s on First”. So I guess no one is immune.

July 27, 2008

by HMStocker

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You’re getting SB seeping in subconsciously!?? Oh no, Mr. Bill! I think this is the curse of most writers. Often I think I’ve coined a term and then it pops up on Jay or some such and I know it didn’t travel from VA to LA within a matter of hours. Makes me wonder…is there ever anything unique in the world?

July 27, 2008

by trident

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Yeah – although I’m not so sure I’d go quoting Spongebob in my reviews (tee hee!)
Catch you round.

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I simply do not “get” it.

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July 27, 2008

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me too – or is it that we both get it?

August 15, 2008

by neophytepoetess

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ha ha thanks I needed a chuckle :)

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difficult for like me a confused person :O)

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good point! Thanks.

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I get the order being out of order, but I think you have a word substituted for something else maybe?

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No – they’re right – but i wish I’d thought of substituting a word – just to play around with everyone who trys to solve the puzzle. Maybe I’ll try that next time.

July 27, 2008

by sjvance

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LOL!  Go for it!

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Amusing but not necessarily working on lots of levels. it doesn’t really tell a story so much but i think we all know the feeling and there’s definately a unifying feeling there.

Very clever! It took me a second to figure this one out. :)

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July 25, 2008

by trident

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Thanks – I think it goes right over most people’s heads. It’s 214th out of 226 :-(

October 29, 2008

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You’re welcome. :)

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Out or order wording is just confusing here. You’d order something if only you could? But what? Your life? A sandwich? Your tax documents? Not enough to this to make someone feel like they’ve gotten a nugget of truth or story from your 6 words.