Haiku/Senryu / A Humid Eve (Analysis)

tis straight dear person. thou hast touched upon a topic close to home.
cheers & gravy
J…

It gave me a sense of permanence and (who would of thunk it?) the permeability of true heat and the fluctuations and resiliency of energy itself.
I’m not sure if heat was meant literally or symbolically, but it works well either way.
In a way, it seems to be speaking of love. Not necessarily romanticized love, but any form of the emotion be it empathy and understanding or deep care and concern for something other than yourself.
The piece had a very clear peaceful tone akin to coming up out of a short, quiet meditation. I really enjoyed it.

It seems like common sense and in a way, elementary. You followed the rules of Haiku excellently, but I feel that what is contained in the body is not as excellent.

It made me feel warm inside. I thought that it was very smart.

im not really into these kinds of writing  but i enjoyed this one, it seems relaxing and stright forward, Great job keep it up

Decent haiku; I mean, I’m usually shit at haikus.  I have so much to say, but the 5-7-5 meter simply isn’t enough!  Anyways…actually, yes, what more can I say but that it’s decent.  It definitely didn’t blow me away in the slightest.

I think it’s an accurate description :)
I feel the humidity…picturing a Georgia summer’s eve. (and i’m from South Africa – heh heh)

that was very good and i enjoyed it alot. i hope u send me more of ur work

Brings an interesting perspective to a humid eve, nice use of the elements.

I was a bit confused to think that “moisture permeates water”, but when I thought about it, I suppose water can permeate water.  Although I’d challenge you to find the seams.

The semi-colons threw me a bit too.  I feel like you might have tried to squeeze an extra line in there.  But don’t fret!  If that was your intent, let it roll, my friend!  I’m not a firm believer in the austere strictness with which many write haiku.  It’s about capturing a thought.  Play with the format.  That’s the whole idea.  

“Warmth lasts throughout eve”—and sometimes into the morning as well.

Nice poem.