Quotes / society (Analysis)

Short though intriguing. My only suggestion is to capitalize Jesus Christ as it is the name of a person. To be gramatically correct.

hi there,

is society that bad?..to compare to jesus….maybe you should compare it to someone, or something else…just my opinion….jim

You’ve improved the spelling, and the first letter of the sentence is correctly capitalized now, but grammatically the sentence still says that “the flesh of jesus christ” “tears through the surface of my heart.”  The problem is where you combine the phrases “cat o’ nine tails” with “the flesh of jesus christ” with the conjunction “and.”

This quote isn’t intriguing.  ”kat” misspelled on purpose or just a typo?
I get the point that society causes pain to the individual, I just feel it could have been done better.  I will say that though it may be cliched (not sure) the “flesh of jesus christ” part was a good use of imagery.  Lose the “kat of nine tails”(sic) I say.

Other than that, point is clear if stated in an less than interesting way.

The imagery is very interesting, but I’d like to know what this “thorn” is. A little too ambiguous for my liking, but good work nonetheless!

I feel your pain but the confusion or unknown is what thorn of society tears through your heart? That would be good to know. I don’t see how the thorn of society will tear through the flesh of Jesus Christ on his judgment day as he will not be judged but will come to judge us with God his father. That is how it reads as written. I’m not sure that is what you meant, for Christ to be judged.

i understand your pain.  society causes a lot of it.  it seems like you’re comparing yourself to christ more here than you are comparing society to the cat o’ nine…

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August 16, 2008

by bigstef211177

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i am sorry ur wrong i am comparing the pain that society causes to the pain the jesus christ held on his shoulder the pain and suffering of an entire world. because in todays society if ur not excepted ur nothing just like he was at least to them he was nothing

August 18, 2008

by nettieoneg

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i don’t think a reader is ever “wrong”.  Much like a painting, words are meant to be open to interpretation. I also disagree with your statement about being accepted because i believe that you should not live you life based on others expectations… but this is the great thing about art, we can disagree and still be civil :)

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I realy like the word “tears”. it sends a real sensation into a sensative part of myself. “suface” is a realy good word too, the surface is often the most painfull part of an injury and i realy think it adds to the effect. The end part of the qoute about jesus brings it all into perspective and realy gives the qoute meaning. It stops being emo, and kinda turns into a reflection of the way the bible percieves the world as a pitfall. It seems a little… i dont know, drawn out? i think those are the words im looking for. Overall i think its a great qoute, its something i would put on my myspace lol.