Quotes / society (Analysis)

This quote isn’t intriguing.  ”kat” misspelled on purpose or just a typo?
I get the point that society causes pain to the individual, I just feel it could have been done better.  I will say that though it may be cliched (not sure) the “flesh of jesus christ” part was a good use of imagery.  Lose the “kat of nine tails”(sic) I say.

Other than that, point is clear if stated in an less than interesting way.

The imagery is very interesting, but I’d like to know what this “thorn” is. A little too ambiguous for my liking, but good work nonetheless!

i understand your pain.  society causes a lot of it.  it seems like you’re comparing yourself to christ more here than you are comparing society to the cat o’ nine…

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August 16, 2008

by bigstef211177

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i am sorry ur wrong i am comparing the pain that society causes to the pain the jesus christ held on his shoulder the pain and suffering of an entire world. because in todays society if ur not excepted ur nothing just like he was at least to them he was nothing

August 18, 2008

by nettieoneg

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i don’t think a reader is ever “wrong”.  Much like a painting, words are meant to be open to interpretation. I also disagree with your statement about being accepted because i believe that you should not live you life based on others expectations… but this is the great thing about art, we can disagree and still be civil :)

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hi there,

is society that bad?..to compare to jesus….maybe you should compare it to someone, or something else…just my opinion….jim

I feel your pain but the confusion or unknown is what thorn of society tears through your heart? That would be good to know. I don’t see how the thorn of society will tear through the flesh of Jesus Christ on his judgment day as he will not be judged but will come to judge us with God his father. That is how it reads as written. I’m not sure that is what you meant, for Christ to be judged.

Short though intriguing. My only suggestion is to capitalize Jesus Christ as it is the name of a person. To be gramatically correct.

Interesting punctuation.  Very ee cummings, at least that was my first thought until reading about the cat o’ nine tails.  Which is the correct spelling, not sure why it was spelled with a K as it made me think of a foreign exchange student back in High School that went by the name Kat.  Again, the last time I checked, JC’s name was capitalized.  But now let’s get into the meat of your quote as so far as my review:

Society is a thorn pricking, piercing, slicing through your heart.  I’d like a bit more insight as to why.  Modern society? Or just society and civilization in general? Would it matter if it were a century ago or ten years from now?  Again, I understand the idea of comparing the passion of JC to the pain that society brings upon you, but again, I’m looking for motive here.  It does so, but why, the analogy doesn’t quite work here because I don’t think it’s real obvious as to exactly what you are getting at.  It’s an interesting premise nonetheless, and I’d like to see what you do with it as this bit morphs in future revisions.

You’ve improved the spelling, and the first letter of the sentence is correctly capitalized now, but grammatically the sentence still says that “the flesh of jesus christ” “tears through the surface of my heart.”  The problem is where you combine the phrases “cat o’ nine tails” with “the flesh of jesus christ” with the conjunction “and.”