Poetry / At This Very Moment... (Analysis)

I hate to sound like a teacher but show don’t tell.
There aren’t any images in here.  No creative language.  Not one simile or metaphor.  Not even a bit of assonance, conssonance, and alliteration.
You don’t have to know what those things are to use them.

As far as specific criticism goes:
You should take out your abstractions.  If you want to write a poem like this, pick a pro-noun (she/he) or alternate, but using the “someone/their” set up screws up your subject verb agreements.  

I would suggest that you pick a couple of these things, the things you are most interested, and actually write a poem (maybe containing different stanzas for each story starting with “someone somewhere is…”) and then show us what that person is doing.  Do this instead of writing a laundry list of abstractions and you will have a good poem that achieves without being cliche the very thing that I think you are trying to achieve.  

Very moving. When you get to the four stanza, it seems a little…off. painting fingernails, pumping iron…from everything else, it seems more life changing, these two things don’t really change your reality.  Maybe if this was at the beginning, as in building up to life changing events. It does create a lot of images (which I love) and a lot of thought provoking ideas.

Thanks, Mo, now write more!