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Lyrics / Your Moment In The Limelight (Analysis)
Go out and break the mold
That’s what we’ve always been told.
Yet, went beyond life that’s so simple
Only to hear…
You’re so rebellious and, uh, much too bold.
We’re all seeking to be different,
High-achieving and so unique.
Crave to open a new life of possibilities
And when we’re upset by the changes…
Start longing for the antique.
While everyone’s competing for their moment in the spot light,
(For their moment to shine.)
Suddenly all faces seem unfriendly but so familiar…
Become so impatient they start blending in the crowd.
Not worth waiting, so they take flight.
What was it they were fighting for?
Their complaining became so loud.
Ah, yes, to see who they could out-shine.
If only they would have waited…
But how they grumbled n’ got frustrated.
We wanted a room full of smiles in order to shine.
Even if all were different,
Not a one showed their smile was divine.
Instead all their impatience was our waste of time.
Songs of An Avantgarde. Vol. I Copyright 2001 L.S. Jones
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Mystery reviewed Version 2 -
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Your moment in the limelight’s lyrics is very good, It would make a good rap song.
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jojack reviewed Version 2 -
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Go out and break the mold
That’s what we’ve always been told.
Yet, went beyond life that’s so simple
Only to hear…
You’re so rebellious and, uh, much too bold.
We’re all seeking to be different,
High-achieving and so unique.
Crave to open a new life of possibilities
And when we’re upset by the changes…
Start longing for the antique.
While everyone’s competing for their moment in the spot light,
(For their moment to shine.)
Suddenly all faces seem unfriendly but so familiar…
Become so impatient they start blending in the crowd.
Not worth waiting, so they take flight.
What was it they were fighting for?
Their complaining became so loud.
Ah, yes, to see who they could out-shine.
If only they would have waited…
But how they grumbled n’ got frustrated.
We wanted a room full of smiles in order to shine.
Even if all were different,
Not a one showed their smile was divine.
Instead all their impatience was our waste of time.
This is awful.
hardcorewriter reviewed Version 2 -
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MrJawbreakingEquilibrium reviewed Version 2 -
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I think it’s a little cookie cutter but they’re good. I can definitely see someone singing it although probably not the type of bands I listen to. Maybe someone like All American Rejects and Matchbox 20. The thing is that I think you’d need a chorus. I’m not a big fan of choruses so I myself think it’s great you don’t rely on them.
As far as the message goes, it’s a good one. And not to sappy. It didn’t make me roll my eyes and go, “Aw, jeez!” It seems like it has potential.
roguescholar reviewed Version 2 -
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Has this been set to music? I really like it. It has some really smart lyrics. It feels like something Shannon Hoon or Ani Difranco might write.
I’m not sure about the meaning of the song, is it about playing to a hostile audience?
I sepecially love this verse pattern:
We’re all seeking to be different,
High-achieving and so unique.
Crave to open a new life of possibilities
And when we’re upset by the changes…
Start longing for the antique.
I’d really like to hear the music.
gaiascully reviewed Version 2 -
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I liked this. I especially love the last line I think that made it for me. What kind of music would this go with? Bluntly, I think could use a bit of polishing, but The overall idea and the feeling of it is great.
MichaelDark reviewed Version 2 -
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Being a long time songwriter here’s what I think…..
If you’re going to ‘rhyme’ be consistant in it’s occurences. Do it every other line per verse, or first and line per verse.
In the chorus and bridges, if there are any, you can break up the flow as they can stand independent of the verses. However keep consistant within these as well.
Of course it is challenging to get the feel of the song accross with only words, as the music will hopefully support the text.
If the lyrics aren’t ‘poetic’ you may find some reviews somewhat…..dissappointing. Keep at it and remeber what I wrote in the previous paragraph.
UP THE IRONS!!!
flamebringer15 reviewed Version 2 -
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That was very nice. It described how everyone wants their chance to be better and acknowledged for it. How everyone is different and it’s a good thing. I liked it because it feels like what everyone says to me or my friends. It sends a very good message to the readers and is very outspoken. Very nice. Thanks for letting my read it.
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hutch reviewed Version 2 -
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I like the way you captured the feeling
of someone wanting that 15 seconds of fame.
TiffVicious reviewed Version 2 -
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I loved the title. I loved the message. The words were beautiful, powerful, and poetic, Your words brought me into the world you were creating. It flowed flawlessly. i loved it.
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