Poetry / Remember Me (Analysis)

Remember Me—(audio)
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Remember me, come morning—
When sunlight spills into our sleepy room
And the birds outside are singing
And the air smells of perfume

Remember me in tangles—
Of warm sheets, and frozen toes
When all was safe and coziness
Was cocooned in afterglow

Remember me, when the steam
Wafts above your coffee cup
How I kissed you on the shoulder—
Yes, I know—I’m getting up

Remember! Yes, remember—
Those were good times that we had
Oh, I loved you. Yes, I loved you…
And the leaving hurt me bad

Keith Allen Scalf
7-23-05

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July 23, 2008

metalhead5891

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metalhead5891 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

i really like this one. i like your verbiage. “cocooned in afterglow” being my favorite.

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May 11, 2008

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Danc3r326 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

mm.. i liked this poem very much. the only thing i would change would be the “And” in line four to “When” since line three also beings with “And” i find it a little distracting. other than that its great! lots of emotion in it. I think that everyone knows what it feels like to leave, or lose someone they loved. So in that way everyone can relate to this poem.

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April 25, 2008

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girl reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

wow. I really enjoyed the meat behind the words of this excerpt. Your a good writer, speaking to the soul of humanity. Keep it up :)

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April 17, 2008

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apoetsdesire reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I love your writing style! The imagery and sensations this piece evokes is wonderful.

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April 16, 2008

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Nvr2Young2Write reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

This makes my heart sort of clench. It is most definatly a “heart wrenching” poem if it makes an average weight teen’s heart almost stop. It’s so felt, you can tell that the emotion described in this is completely true, not fabricated in the least. Please do not make this the end of your writing I look forward to your future work =)