Poetry / Into the darkness

Although this rhymes and flows, I’m not sure what the point of the poem is. Perhaps that’s what you meant when you mentioned “plot” did you mean “story”? I think you have to know what you are trying to write about BEFORE you start writing. What do you want to say: Was this a foolhardy individual? Is there something you want to say about violence? There has to be a reason to describe this fight. I can’t give you a reason; I myself probably wouldn’t write a poem about a fight and even if I had an idea, this should be your poem, not mine.

I liked this, although did not totally understand the end.

add to the begaining a brief description of the assailent or the or of the trigger mechanisem, and add to the end a discription of the assailents departure and you will have it,, bravo  however you use the word I to often  you could loose half of them without confusing the rader in the slightes abd it would flow more smoothly

Below I offer some technical advice. As for plot expansion, there isn’t much to work with. Maybe you could offer more specific information pertaining to the fight? Also, The last line seemed to come from nowhere…I couldn’t make sense of it.

Into the darkness of the night,
I find myself in pain[.]
I have just been beaten in a fight[-]
Nothing to lose and nothing to gain[.]
Now I lay on the ground,
Screaming[,] seeking help, [from anyone{remove}]
I have lost a crown[.]
Blood is all over[,]
I’m hoping they are done[.]
I have lost my sight,
[I am in serious pain,{Consider removing, the reader already knows you’re in pain}]
I’d rather not have been in this fight[.]
I must have been insane,
I guess this was your turf,
How was I to have known[?]
I will[,] like the tide[,]
move on into another surf,
Now that I have died[,] a tree has grown.

There are two lines that confuse me, the first being ‘Nothing to lose and nothing to gain’ because the poem, in my eyes, describes loss, and apparently, you had some things to lose because you are pining over them (‘Lost a crown’).  The other line is ‘Now that I have died a tree has grown.’  That could, again just to me, either be too vague or not at all.  (It could have a hidden, actual meaning relating to the poem or it could be more literal, which doesn’t seem to relate to the poem…)  If it has a meaning, so be it.  Good.  

Overall it is workable.  Solid.  Keep on writing.  :)

deep.  Not sure about telling what happened.  why not show it more. ” I have been in a fight”.. make the reader see the fight.  Feel the pain.  ...” blood is all over”.. strong imagery.  Could use more of that. The ending is a bit confusing too.