Lyrics / aeons of epoch
in a field of lifeless flowers
Abel dances in the rain
near the blackend ship of broken dreams
under the bridge, the sunset calls to me
does it hurt to inhail,with all thorns in your side
dear abel, your mother abandonded us near a distilled sea
If the steady tide will bring shallow light
then let it shine!
If mirror skin cracks under shards of teeth
then let it shine!
If anchored feet and dripping heat
bring a end with tsunami sin
then let it end, in time
brother abel, has you’ve lost your wings
has hades hand given you a sting
Morpheus, the king of dreams
please grant me a scene of peace
for this broken shore has hades curse
oh, zeus please strike me down
unless apollo sends the sun
and destroys this hand fashioned town
raziel is coming, coming through the trees
raziel is coming, coming for me
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enjoyable, cliche in bits but overall nicely flows
especially liked the mirror skin paragraph but believe it needs ‘an’ end with tsunami sin, the greek gods are certainly suitable sujects…
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This seems like a wicked good song. I wish there was like music in the back to get the whole affect. I have a bunch of parts that I liked. This part is prob. one of my favorites out of it does it hurt to inhail,with all thorns in your side.
Specifically, I,m flabbergasted at the maturity of the piece,it’s poetic purity.It reads as a piece from a poet with a following who would be familiar with the artists’ dillemas.Please put me in as a friend.I would love to peruse your work.
Kind of a jumbled mess. Not very focused. LIke line #1: In the field, in the rain, near a ship, under a bridge. That’s about eight ideas/locations in four lines. Cluttered at best.
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