Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Perfection (Analysis)

That journal entry hits home to me, I know so many people who think they are too fat and don’t eat enough, I just want everyone to realize that just because models are skinny, playboy girls are skinny, you should be happy with who you are on the inside and outside no matter who you are and what size of clothes you wear.

You definitely inspire one to think. You have pegged the American way of thinking in your writing.

You make me wonder if this is written from a personal level or if you have don a lot of research for this piece of work.

Definitely inspiring and thought provoking

I think it is a great topic you bring up… so sad and serious. I think you have a skill that needs honing. At 16 you have a lot of deep thoughts.

“Perhaps YOU’RE not at all affected”
“CongraTulations”
There is also a lot of periods that could have just been continued sentences.
Anorexia if very sad and you obviously have a kind, compassionate heart. Keep writing :)

Yet It’s inevitable to suppress/eradicate this metal disease…. But maybe one day it will be seen! n breath like the free breeze that will lead them to see that there’s not an obtuse scene but only a blinding thing…

Very nice piece. Goes straight to the heart of the matter. Causes reader to ask serious questions of themselves and society as a whole. Definitely should continue writing. You have a great gift for conveying your ideas to the reader.

I really liked this even though its a subject that has been touched upon a lot its always nice to look at it from a personal angle, and we do have to question or image concious mentalities, not evryone is confident within themselves, and we have to really start tackling this confidence issue, because only when we adress society and the pressures it puts on people, whther subconcious or otherwise, then we will solve the problems of eatin disorders and the like that you mention, well done and thanks a lot for the request, i really enjoyed reading, thank you =D…goo 16 year olds :P

Hi,

You’ve gone straight to the heart of a problem that is growing worse by the day. This article is a perfect description of how bulimia nervosa begins. Some young men are afflicted with the disease but it’s much more prevalent in girls and young women. And it’s no wonder. Just as you said, advertising in all forms, extols the slim female body, implying that if one weights over 100 pounds, then he or she will not get the shiny new car, the high salary career or the perfect mate.

The skinny models in the slick advertising are not, as we all know, normal, but to a young girl who might think she is a bit overweight, they are an invitation to disaster.

I noticed only one typo and it’s minor; “educatio” for “education”.

You’ve done a good job on this journal and I like how you get to the point without a lot of fluff.

Charley
      

Two typos: Education and congratulations.

This is a thought-provoking piece. This topic is definitely one that needs to be talked about. Have you any plausible solutions, or is this a musing? You have added some nice depth and emotion to your writing. :)

This is certainly an extremely important topic for women who read these types of magazines. Being 24 years old, I still remember the image issues I faced in high school when I looked at these beautiful skinny women in magazines and wondered when I could look like that. It has taken years to reach the point where I don’t think about it anymore, and I think you captured that feeling that we all go through during our adolescence. The only thing I would say is check for grammar and spelling. I caught a “your” where there should be a “you’re”. Overall, I like that you spoke about something that’s very hard for women to express.

So true on aalot of levels…..Clearity was ok…but becareful with your wordings….seemed odd  in some places…