I wrote this on two whims…when I first started on urbis.com, then went on a leave of absence. So, now that I am back, yes, I actually going to put some more thought into it. So, thanks of the advice and tips. Will do.
Humor/Satire / Teen Spirit II or retitled - Teen Angst – Past, Present and future
If only teen angst was a team sport – I could imagine how the team would discuss their game plan -
1st teen says – “What angst awaits us?”
2nd teen says – “What shall we do with these ones?”
3rd teen says – “What were yesterdays?”
Of course in light of their discussion…they would see how silly the game is and their angst would fade away, but – would that be a winning goal?
Also, what would be their “motto”? Would they have t-shirts with clever sayings? What would their team names be? Would they have mascots too? I would guess there would have to be a formal structure too such as – teen angst captain and adult supervision with teen angst coaches? Plus, if there were team angst captains or coaches – would they have to put together motivational speeches of why teen angst is important and what purpose it serves? Would the speeches in the locker room be something like this?
“Teen angst has been the fuel for some of the most beautiful writings and the makings of some great people. So, get out their team and show them what you got!!!”
I guess the real question would be – could team angst ever reach the level of personal angst? I mean teen angst is one of the most popular games of solitaire ever known to man. Yet, it has no rules, not structure, no cheerleaders etc.
Are does it?
Would the countless profiles (the replacement to diaries and journals) with badges of personal angst written all over them be some form of structure for solo angst? Would a video (the replacement of public outburst) of someone spilling their personal angst out onto the world be some form of a score or goal if it became viral? When you think about it you could go on and on about how well defined personal angst is with rules, structures and cheerleaders. On a personal note – I would think that suicide would be some form of violation of the game – which disqualifies you from ever playing again.
Now, in conclusion, after writing this – I have come to see that teen angst has always been a solo/team sport and that I have just been oblivious to that fact. So, to celebrate my new awareness of this fact and let teens know they should angst with pride, I am proclaiming this -
“Go team, go! Hurray”
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i see your point here. :)
what i like most is the very last line.
minor errors:
“get out their team” =should be= get out there, team
“Are does it?” =should be= or does it?
i’d like to see more imagery here, though. how ‘bout making exaggerated scenarios ridiculing teen angst? i suggest you put it before the second part (” When you think about it you could go on and on…”). you have to leave a picture in the heads of your audience so they don’t easily forget what you wrote.
~GBÜ
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This is way too analytical and not humorous enough. You pose a lot of questions, but rarely provide possible answers. I’d try to describe teenagers more- go into a brief imagining of what the team uniforms might be. Also, in the opening, when you imagine the game plan, maybe make it something more like “What’s our game plan?”/ “Who cares.”
Also, the word “angst” appears A LOT. Switch it up a bit. “Ennui”, “depression”, “funk” (as in “he’s in a funk”), “sullenness”, etc.
OfTrepidation reviewed Version 2 -
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I thought this piece was very funny and true too! I like the metaphor as a football team. And, especially about the motto. Fun stuff indeed.
celticqueenette reviewed Version 2 -
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I love it! It’s very good and funny too.
Buck reviewed Version 2 -
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Something about all the angst apparent on sites like this. Love it! Brings me back to my own years of teen angst. I liked how you reasoned with yourself throughout the piece, coming to a conclusion by the end. This is a great example of taking a well-worn subject matter and approaching it in a totally fresh way. I think the teen dialogue could be more realistic, but that’s just nit picking. I enjoyed this. Cheers.
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