Poetry / Empty Page (Analysis)
In a lonely town where ghostly realities reside
escaping becomes the only goal;
I follow the weak indication of train-tracks
This town is off the maps
and only the ghost train can take you away;
on my page there is little hint of a start
The sky is pallid paper and the clouds not yet drawn;
what’s written falls down like rain but holds no meaning;
the ink fading away due to uncertainty
Like every paragraph not yet surfaced
this uncharted territory and these unfilled lines have me lost;
train-tracks buried in words never said
Each sentence doesn’t reach the paper
like the existence of the town to the rest of the world;
only memory can hold them together
Thoughts are drowned in indecision
the hint of a sunrise never stirring beyond the tracks;
bitter love, rewrite this empty page titled: ‘my heart’
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I think this is well put, I knew right in the middle of the poem that you were talking about you’re heart. It is well written and has a good meaning to it. I really liked it.
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I see the youth in this poem—that’s a good thing! It resonates with my past and I’m sure with others. I get optimism and uncertainty. Very nice.
Well. Hmmm. I find it a little confusing, but you know what, there’s something that does come across that strikes me as quite promising. I think the writer is trying to fuse two concepts together here. I applaud the effort, though its not quite meshing for me, I see potential.
Keep writing!
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