Poetry / Love

No sugar coating here. ;)

I like this, but I wonder why you didn’t categorize it as a quote. As it stands, with its form, it lacks any true rhythm and in my book doesn’t qualify as poetry. HOWEVER, I definitely think this quote has a lot of potential to be chiseled into a poem.

Just think it over, read the lines over and over, and then determine where you want to put each section of the quote in the form of a poem(line breaks, rhyme, wordplay, etc.). The beauty in a piece like this is that it’s like a puzzle, you have all the pieces, now you just need to turn it into poetry. Also, I feel like you would benefit going over grammar and punctuation, it does wonders with flow and rhythm in poetry.

Overall, you’re on the right track :)

This also touched my heart, as any good writing should. I had been through hell with an ex boyfriend, but now I find myself with a man I’m proud to call mine, who is truly the best thing that ever happened to me. It really is a beautiful message, and I wish more people my age would subscribe to this idea, that love is very strong, and something to be ‘careful’ with.

I liked some of the ideas in this but it didn’t read like a poem to me: it lacked rhythm, flow, a little imagery:

I liked in particular: it is not a

Often it is very prose-like: You can’t always be certain you’ve found true love
but it is there somewhere latent and sleeping – for instnance

Love is hard cause so much on the subject is cliche, the poem itself is good, but i would try to find a line to add in that is really unique, maybe change out one for something about a loved one dying of a decease or something and their partners willingness to stay by their side. Not bad though. I enjoyed it.

Good luck!!

I feel this one deeply. It is very well written, and great descriptors..

I really like the ending. Not a fan of the format. The format doesn’t necessarily break things up in a way that forces me to think about the gravity of each line. I’m not a fan of your rhyming. You rhymed with words that were to simple and detracted from the beauty of your poem. Like “like it or not” and “all you’ve got”.

This isn’t really poetry. It kind of reads more like a blog entry.

This line: “When you really love someone you will do anything for them, whether you realize it or not, you will help them with all you’ve got, and ask only that they love you back in return.” is a little bit cliched to be good poetry.

I agree with your assessments, I just don’t think they’re particularly poetic.

It is a quaint and concrete warning. Love should definitely no be confused with lust or passion. At the same time though, as you indicated “You can’t always be certain you’ve found true love but it is there somewhere latent and sleeping, like the grizzly bear, hibernating until it is time to make its way to the surface. ”, should not be considered non-existent. It is out there somewhere latent and patient. Excellent flow too. It didn’t lead me astray and was very effective at allowing me to feel it.

That was touching…..

Good but not brilliant.  It’s honest and straightforward.  Most people would agree with every word, so in that sense it doesn’t say anything new.  But hints at some one who has been hurt by love, possibly first love.

Very nice, but I think you need to fix the carriage-return on the lines as it seems to break randomly and there is one long line right in the middle.

Try to keep lines short and sweet for a open, that is my suggestion. Whenever a well-timed pause would happen, that’s the best point to put the rest of the text on the next line down. It looks neater and will really bring out the details of this poem.