Poetry / Ophelia # 3

Ophelia is turning in her grave-
Why did I drown for this?
  The lingering begs.
Waits for a Resurection
  but there just may be
    no revolution
      from here…
In the wake of
  surrender or balance
and the lingering still begs-
  and wonders-

is there a difference?

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michaelolsen avatar General Stranger

March 06, 2008

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Maybe I’m tired (and I am), but I’m having difficulty getting this one.  I’m wishing for more imagery, less description.

Comment if you wish, or perhaps once reviewed, I might get a better idea (I reading this one blind via the Urbis review queue)...

Thanks,

Michael

rsman26 avatar General Stranger

March 06, 2008

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This is a great piece, the words have power and depth, with a great flow and imagery, I particually liked the last line, quite profound.  Great job.

AngelRain avatar General Stranger

March 03, 2008

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Interesting though I did not read the first two. I am left to assume that the person is dead and sees the reason she’s dead as being not worthy of dying for.
Other than that, perhaps check spelling of resurrection. Like the phrase “surrender or balance.”

aliciatr avatar General Friend

March 02, 2008

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Resurection…spelled resurrection

Very nice piece; I like the alliteration with resurrection and revolution and the phrase “in the wake of surrender”

Great diction.

Gingerlea avatar General Stranger

March 02, 2008

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Really, really amazing & oh-so-true.  Thank you for posting this.  I love Ophelia & I do, too believe she is turning in her grave.

Great job.

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