Haiku/Senryu / Trying To Cleave Beer

thanks.
do you understand the title?

Hahahaha. Not at all. I have theories but I think I’m off.

I don’t usually give answers, but…what the hell!
The title is: ‘Trying to be clever’

thanks. perhaps i could shorten the second line from seven syllables to seven syllables then, yes!
just joking!

SORRY! I just learned what this type of poem thingy is. My wrong not yours!

prob nolem.

mid-line (I’m assuming you did get all of it, but will say nevertheless) is ‘senseless sentences transposed’.
it means nothing alone. thing is, i guess it’s the non-independent functioning of it which is supposed to incite the reader to deconstruct the puzzle.

thanks.

It was a fun puzzle. I feel better somehow for having figured it out.

hi. sedcond line ‘senseless sentences’ as for the ‘why’, well, i’m not so sure that’s a relevant question with haiku; or indeed any poetry!
thanks.

i don’t see any difference between reading in the mind and out loud. never understood that one, but i know i’m in the minority.
i always love it when people (not you) say ‘try reading it out loud’; does this imply they cannot read it in their head to assess the rhythm. very strange! but i’m not mentioning you here.
thanks,
O

second line is a transposition.
it’s not in my style to give answers (oh god, i’m so avant garde!), but, given that people have below already written (one of) them, the second line is ‘senseless sentences transposed’.

however, the title of the piece is also a transposition of sorts, though a more obscure one; i.e. it’s not so symmetrical a transposition that the letters re-arrange with exact, scalpel-like precision.

rather, i guess it’s bumping one’s head asymmetrically against a wall – while thinking of the title – that maximises to the most voluminous extent the chances of intuiting it.

tell me if you try: to derive the title’s ‘pun’, if it may be so-called, that is.

thanks.
Oliver

Scratch that… I reread the first line, properly. Makes perfect sense now.

i love your picture by the way: the surreal evocation of a bridesmaid on the beach, post-expensive wedding.
it also calls to mind another of my favourite images, which occurs in one of Bryan Ferry’s music videos!

...in fact, it has just prompted me to change my avatar to a pic i took this year!