Journal, Diary, & Blogging / The day I realized that I would die (Analysis)

Short, but very nicely done.  Is also powerful, and gave good imagery in the Lipton commercial.  You maybe could have described it a little better though.

HAHAHA! I can definitely relate to the realization of death at a young age. It is a very real thought you expressed very well.

I always think it’s a great idea to write about personal experiences, especially ones that have a significant affect on our personal lives. I know this is a journal entry, however I do have one suggestion to perhaps strengthen your writing; I think you could make this into a really great short story by going into more detail and describing the experience in more depth. Don’t be afraid to expand on memories and ideas with lots of creativity. Some of the best stories come from even slightly exaggerated real life experiences. I think you’re off to a great start. Keep it up and you’ll exceed your original expectations of yourself.

I suppose it is rather daunting to discover those around you will die.
I realized this in a more violent way, but let’s not get into that.

I don’t understand, though, how this made you realize you would die. A girl going from hell to heaven doesn’t make me think of death, but.. I don’t know..

lawled at the Author notes.

Its short and to the point, but I’d be curious as to how you relate this event to later thoughts on death. Id think of how you could use this as an introduction to your current ideas on mortality. Its certainly a strange moment to realize you were eventually going to die. I think my understanding of it came when my grandfather passed when I was about the same age.

I really enjoyed this, it was short, but had a great point to it.  I think everyone learns they are going to die, but how and where is different for us all!