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This one hurts. So much communication in so few carefully placed words and feelings. Wonderful revelation of the human dilema...needing, but not receiving. McKinley

Every word in this work is used purposefully--no waste--crafted expertly. More than that, the meaning is so human. There are fingerprints all over this--spoken by a voice who knows. Excellent poetry! McKinley

18 and life to go...that's an 80's song you're probably too young to know. I'm amazed at your talent. They tell me in the review rules here that I have to mention things that need "improvement" in a work. The only question I have is, Is the "I" in the poem art as well, or is "she" alone the art. Now, let me tell you how amazing this is. The story of it is so vivid to me. "Her feet are stones in a tin can" --that image alone is worth the whole read, but this is stocked full of so much beauty. ...

This is a very bleak, realistic vision of letting go of life. The rhythm is excellent--I feel the blood draining...the darkness taking over. Your work is very sincere and effective...an excellent job. Perhaps let the last two lines stand alone--they are the saddest...the end. Standing alone, they may get your point across even stronger. You are talented. Keep writing, McKinley

So you've told the secret to appreciating the written word...are people listening? I see a theme--properly arranged words (poetry)--are like a drug if applied to the senses correctly. But the description of the effect the poetry should have is raw and physical. How refreshing. A hint of how you might feel, what you might see should be enough for every person who is intimidated by poetry to brave it. This work has a function outside of being a pleasure for the mind--it's a set of directions fo...