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AGE: 54
LOC: Spring Hill, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 08

I am the pain
the bruises
thetrusting puppy  you just hit

who
loses
I am your mother in you
I am your baby that never came.
I’m not
the rain.

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A child is supposed to rise and bloom and fly away and become the thing you're proud of. But I didn't go that way. I didn't end up famous or wealthy just a cog in someone else's wealthy wheel-- a spinster with a dog. I didn't give you grandkids to brighten the autumn years' mists I don't help much around the house just sleep and smoke and make you lists I've never ever been for you a thing you're bragging of. But quietly, I learned from you the meaning of true love. Secretly I've learned fro...
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Look what you hit what you won't babysit that tot like you thought anymore. Look what you slit thinking you could outwit any god who'd permit blood and gore. Look what you did to that brave little kid whose candle stayed lit just a bare little bit enough to emit where she had been hid and how close she was to a door
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I'm so glad I have a friend who always knows the way and stays with me right to the end I'm glad you made this day. Thank you Jesus for the sun and for my feet that let me run and for the colors of the world that spin together when they're twirled thank you for things that fly,the hummingbird, the butterfly, and for the mountains reaching high and for the stars that kiss the sky for this day's supper and supply for this world we briefly occupy the hope you give me when I try the love you giv...
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Poetry / How It Works
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He hastened someone's final breath; he made somebody dead. And so, his wages must be Death. That's how it works, they said. He has killed, and so we must do to him as he did. It is only right and just. That's what they told the kid. But then, the child asked in awe, if he must die because he took a life, and you must do unto him as he does, then who must do it unto you? and who must end your days? And who must deal with all of you according to your ways? We can answer that, they said, all se...
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The day was turned to midnight, and the earth unzipped by squalls; the heavens suffered tremors, and our windows turned to walls. We crowded 'round the fire, feeling smug and safe and warm. That's when our elder brother called out, "Come and see the storm." We turned him down politely, and he left to go alone, but we couldn't let him leave us on the darkest day we'd known. We begged him, "Stay"--he answered, "Come"--and one by one we came; for cold and wind and wet and roar, we left our dying...
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You would have a great story iiif it was longer. It's to short to even make an episode of Gunsmoke with. But it's a beaut. I feel like i am the guy in the street hearing the rounds of drinks that placate everyone else , too many, many times I am dragged out there. Once i got a high IQ on a reder's Dif=gest IQ test and the other 3 who took it said no way and i cheated just cuz none got oast the first problem when the timer stopped-they were so lost! I hate it when your truth is not believed. I...
Short Story / When Will I Wake Up?
I agree with your view of the cliched life but It isn't a story but like a story of a story.A story shows not tells, this is all tell. For example you'd start with conversation and being on that show up close , a scene of it. It's true to life and that dirty dog Ralph is not how a story would say it , they'd make you realize he's a rotten man, not tell you. Still I like youtr little style.And I'm glad you are on the q as all this other stuff was trite. Of course he took her tupperware.I can h...
Non-fiction / My [yet untitled] Memoir
You put too much weight and neediness on Allison, that is why she seems mad. Please let people smile at you-get out of the house. If people don't smile in Washington, if they are like Russians, go to the next small town. Go to where the night fishermen gather all night, go to the smiling people who aren't there artifically by alcohol.If I had smiled at Cho and then you had and then the cashier had and then the next person all his life those Virginia students wouldn't be dead. It's good writin...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Lost and Found
I like "the dark shore" and some other visions because i LOVE THOSE Places AT THOSE TIMES OF DAY but you said the corps and left the quotes going on so that it is the cult known as "Corps Cynicism and Practicality Have Taken Over My Otlook It Is Both Often and Normal Being Lost in My Surroundings Emotionally and Intellectually It Is the Quiet Moments of Solitude and Freedom in the Beauty of This Place in Which I Find Myself Corps." You also don't say enough .. Keep trying, Waikki is new to me...
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