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AGE:
18
LOC: Jacksonville, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 28
LOC: Jacksonville, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 28
i am -map.
its just my initials..overthink it if you want.
it will only make in more interesting.
the universe is nice so far.
i’ll make what i make of it…
and put it into some words for you.
have a real day.
-map
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I walked along the school hallways. out the front doors. two men sat across the street, asking if i'd seen their dog. a pup, half pitbull half chow. i said no. but i would look out for it. a child's broken playphone lay on the ground. it was a picture opportunity i had to pass by for a lack of camera. at the corner, sat a small grocer. the black people were confused. asked if i was from around here. i said "yeah...i'm from around here. i come around. go around. i'm around." the man looked ang...
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I walked along the school hallways. out the front doors. two men sat across the street, asking if i'd seen their dog. a pup, half pitbull half chow. i said no. but i would look out for it. a child's broken playphone lay on the ground. it was a picture opportunity i had to pass by for a lack of camera. at the corner, sat a small grocer. the black people were confused. asked if i was from around here. i said "yeah...i'm from around here. i come around. go around. i'm around." the man looked ang...
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life doesn't hand me lemons. it hands me moldy green oranges. what the hell am i supposed to do with these? -map
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i'll make you a deal. i'll give you something. and you give something of equal value back. no more. no less. ever equal. now the question resides in, who among us know the value of things like this. things that contain with them memories. scenes from an old silent picture. black and white with red propaganda on our minds. the only person who would is the man no among us. instead, he lives in his own little hut. and everything is equivalent. everything.
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Being a Roman Catholic teen in today’s society, especially in a public school with large religious diversity, is very hard. Being a Roman Catholic teaches you to be a loner. You don’t get out much. People don’t really talk to you, not necessarily because you’re Catholic. They probably don’t know or care about that. But you separate yourself so much from “the scene” that it moves on without you. In silence, I say more to my peers than words could. I know that when I decide to sit with people a...
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i like the "open your palettes". VERY creative. but your poem doesn't match up with the line. the rest is kind of "blah". if you're describing a season...you have to be super original. use descriptions that just come out of your mind. things no one's ever described fall as. like I personally would describe it as "bread crust". or "a red scented candle from hallmark". something weird..but so true.
the syllables don't correlate.and i don't like the word slain. it doesn't fit. find another absurd word.
as a quote. i don't care much for this. it didn't teach me anything. but as a poem..this could be good. people will complain that its too short...but its a good poem . a good description of a moment. make something slightly bigger from it. it has potential. just a few lines could make it amazing.
something's missing. the lines are all imaginative and fairly original except "piercing my soul". you lost me on that one. i think you should reconsider the spacing/structure. and your title could be more attention grabbing. the title is vital in a person even considering your poem. otherwise...you have talent.
the first line was attention grabbing..but the rest confused me. and the last line was just cheesy. "wind changing" is an overused figure of speech. you can do better. think original. be original.
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