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AGE: 23
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 20

Well, what to say? Hello. Always a good starting point, I’d guess.

I’m currently a 23 year old college student, an English major. I primarily write science fiction and fantasy. Honestly, that’s pretty much all I write.

It’s the start of a new semester, hopefully my last one. If all goes well, I will soon be a college graduate. I’ve just found my first gray hair, which is cool. My family has a tendency to gray VERY early. If I hadn’t been looking forward to it, I’d blame my school’s Financial Aid department for giving me so many hassles over enrollment this semester. Oh, well.

I feel I should apologize for how long my reviews tend to be. I’m not trying to get more points, I just want to be thorough. I’ll try shortening them.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Mercy's Price Chapter 5
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Ryu stepped out of the car and glanced around the campus. The place looked different in daylight. It might also be that his eyes were clearer now that he wasn’t looking for a place to curl up and die. He paused on the sidewalk and waited for Claire to lock her car and join him. “Well, this is the campus,” Claire said. She shifted from foot to foot uncertainly. Ryu realized that he’d been watching her a little too closely. She was not H’Gan. There was no reason to watch her face to see when h...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Mercy's Price Chapter 4
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9 Reviews   15 Comments
Claire woke up, and took stock of her situation. _Ugly couch_. She was at the twins’ then. There could not be two such ugly couches in the world. _Soft blanket_. She must’ve dozed off. What had they been doing? She felt like she’d just been doing an all nighter to study for exams. Exams weren’t until next month, though. _Sore throat_. That made no sense. She didn’t feel sick. _A hand on her shoulder_. Who? “Lady, they are only dreams. They cannot harm you.” She tried to roll over so she coul...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Mercy's Price Chapter 3
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Anna had been most disappointed by the creature’s absence at the gathering. H’Gan could understand. Pietro had long vanished and she hadn’t yet found a new toy. She enjoyed playing with H’Gan’s Familiar whenever she could. If he weren’t working so hard to train the creature, he’d be tempted to loan it to her for a weekend. It was always so much more cooperative after its encounters with Anna. It was also completely useless. H’Gan left the gathering early and drove home. He was startled to fi...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Mercy's Price Chapter 2
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8 Reviews   13 Comments
The Familiar rested his head against the cold glass of the girl’s car window. Claire, she’d called herself. He studied his benefactor out of the corner of his eyes while she concentrated on the road. She had shoulder-length, wavy brown hair haphazardly tied back from her face with an elastic band. Her eyes were green. Not dark like his own, but bright and innocent. She looked to be about twenty years old. In his time she’d have been almost middle aged, but by current standards she was only b...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Mercy's Price Chapter 1
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Friday evening, the sun dropped below the horizon leaving the university campus in deep shadow. Electric lights fashioned after antique street lamps cast cones of warm golden light between a ring of imposing brick buildings surrounding a single, modern glass fronted building. A single figure strolled unconcerned between light and shadow. Nighttime was Claire Alexander’s favorite part of the day, especially nighttime in autumn. She loved the way the wind felt on her skin, the bite of cold on ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Against Good Sense
by WaywardSonRising
This has potential, and I'd read it if published. The opening paragraph is good. It tells the reader a lot about the characters without too many words. It's not too dialog heavy, and there's some solid descriptions. The only problem I noticed was a few typos. "piss of", for example, should be "piss off". Nothing serious, but I thought I'd point it out. Also, one little thing seemed unrealistic. The king had someone hung for peeing on a public road? Jailed, maybe, or punished somehow, but exec...
Quotes / On writers and poets
by Fhilidh
It's a little wordy. I had to read it a few times to follow. There is some truth to the notion, though. Maybe use a word other than "embellishment". It really only means "lie", or "exaggeration". You used the word "poem" for what poets do, maybe use "writing" or "stories" in place of embellishment.
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Rent to Own
by yesandno
I definitely want to know where you're going with this one. The idea of renting out a few days of your life is fascinating. I'd love to see more of this society. What is the wall? How great is the divide between rich and poor? How far in the future is it, or is this an alternate dimension? And what is the revolution the fairy woman (I'm assuming that's her on the phone) mentions? What happened over those three days? Some of the dialog was hard to follow, but I think you give enough clues. It ...
Short Story / The Assignment
by TheSatch
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Poetry / Beyond the Door
by Chalaedra
This is lovely, as both a poem and a prayer. I like the rhythm and rhyme scheme, it's soothing. The line "Having passed through life's final test" might fit better without the word "through". I'm not sure why, it felt jarring to me. The tone changes slightly with "But hold me here..." I like the shift, the idea of the dead pausing to give a little peace to those left behind.
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